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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
I'm almost at the end. Say it isn't so!

Another wonderful chapter, not that I expected anything less. It felt like the tone in this was slightly different from the previous ones, maybe because of the inclusion of all the back story. It removed just a bit of the whimsical air of the piece, but it also felt right. Xeno needed to be told why she ran away from him. And you handled the answer beautifully. The story about the boy breaking her pin was truly heartbreaking.

Despite all the heavy reflection from Capria, I loved the way you still managed to add some humor throughout the chapter. Protecting Your Brain from Drain-Dwellers -- what a perfectly "Xeno" sort of article. And his almost childlike innocence when it came to asking Daphne about why she wants to marry his brother... So sweet. And, of course, him shouting after the bird. What a great mental image that was.

And when his brother handed over his wand? That was so unexpected and so sweet. I know he's just a "supporting character," but I've loved Astrelius throughout.

The way you tied it all together with that line at the end was just gorgeous writing. In this strange way, you've sort of found this simple idea to describe something as complicated as being in love. It's not doing things because you need to or want to, but because you can't imagine doing anything else.

Okay, only one more to go. I have to say, reviewing your story has been such a treat!

Author's Response: I'm glad the tone wasn't too heavy. I knew I needed to add some depth to avoid the "fluff" genre, but I didn't want to bog the story down. Thank you for letting me know it all fit in.

I'm also glad you loved Astrelius! I don't know why, but I felt like he was needed. As much as I wanted to focus on Xeno and Capria, I also wanted there to be a second narrative running throughout, to round out Xeno's character. And the result was that I fell in love with Astrelius as well. *sigh* The woes of being an author.

Again, thank you!


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