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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Honestly, this story just gets better and better with each chapter.

The description in this chapter really seemed to shine, not that it was good in all the previous chapters. But right from the start it catches you.

-- The sleeping metal beasts quickly grew warm in the mid-afternoon haze, entirely forgotten by the feet that spun them to life, the feet that had wandered off through the tall grass and onto greater things.

Wow, now that was just beautiful. And the way you described the sugary summer air... Really, you have a wonderful knack for using you physical descriptions to perfectly capture the mood.

And of course, I continue to love the characters. When Xeno says 'thank you' to Capria for bringing him to her parents' grave, I immediately thought of when he took the girlfriend up into the attic. Thank you is exactly the sort of thing I imagine he'd have wanted her to say in that moment. He was trying to open himself to her just like Capria is now doing with him. And the part about not being used to warm was so touching and just more proof of the perfect couple the two of them make.

Ahh, I was so hoping she'd get him to sing! And I love that her reactions was to tell him he was terrible. It's sort of like when she told him he was strange. It's just a fact, not a judgement, and that makes it almost sweet.

So clearly I'm continuing to adore this. I'm off to read the next chapter right now and find out why Capria doesn't want to go to the wedding with Xeno!

Author's Response: Thank you! At the time I wrote this chapter, I was deep into my first semester of Creative Writing, and I was really working on improving my description. So glad it made an impression!

Yes, that's exactly what I love about the two of them--that they are honest with each other, but there is no judgment attached to their comments. They're just facts. So many people get offended at things that aren't meant to be offensive, so I wanted both Xeno and Capria to be a sharp contrast to that. They accept things as they are. No questions asked.

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