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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
HELLO!

Its Gabbie here with your requested review and since we've never spoken before its nice to meet you and all that good stuff. I have not read many AU's to be honest so I wasnt' really sure how to feel about this, its like stepping out of your comfort zone. But I loved what you've done here. To be honest, I thought that the middle of the chapter should have been the beginning but as I kept reading, especially getting to the end, I think it makes more sense now.
You've changed quite a bit too, I must say but I'm not missing the canon in this! You've created another world with Harry while touching on a sensitive issue wonderfully. Another life for him while still being plagued with the things that tormented him as a child is very evident. And the fact that we see familiar faces like Sirius, Remus and yes, Draco, was enough to keep me going.
It was hard reading about Devlin being tortured though. I love kids so I had to pause and shake it off to keep going but its so well written that I couldn't stay away for long. You don't give a real reason as to why Voldemort wants to kill Harry's son though and I wonder if you will later on? Devlin himself is an unusually strong little boy and his magic is something that's got me really curious. There's something lurking there that you're not saying yet and I'd like to know what it is. >:D
I think you did a great job of writing Voldemort as well, I could practically see that sneer on his face. He's such a hard character to write for but you mixed culture and sadism really well, if that makes any sense.
Harry's change after Devlin was taken was heartbreaking to read. I think you played on all of those emotions really well and the fact that he was willing to break the Law to find his son's killer really showed how much depth and change you've brought into him. Loved it. ;)
And that pensieve! Argh, I teared up a little. I really, really did. It was simply beautiful and the dreamlike quality of it only made the interrogation of the Death Eater all the more tense. But my God, that ending! And the description of Devlin? Who is this little boy and how did he change so drastically? The Death Eater himself seemed a little unsettled by him! Like, what? Hahah. You left a great cliffhanger and as an author who LOVES to torture people with cliffhangers, well done! I think the only CC that I can give you is that somewhere in the beginning with Alex and Harry you said "far bettered trained" and you might want to change it.
Otherwise, this is a really unique story and I'll be stopping by again. I thought your pacing was quick and clean and the dialogue was perfection, so keep on going with this!
Much love,
Gabbie

P.S.: I really hope this helps! I can't give monstrously long reviews! >_

Author's Response: This is a rewrite and originally the "eight years later" scene WAS first. When I rewrote it I felt like people really wanted to know how Devlin was kidnapped (but then I thought that was too slow paced to be first) and the first time Voldemort and Devlin meet. Thus, the current progression...which I'm not sure is working as well as I really wanted but...

Does Voldemort need a reason to kill anything related to Harry Potter? In cannon he says he'll essentially kill anyone associated with him. Isn't it enough reason that it would hurt Harry?
Besides that, Voldemort doesn't know about Devlin's blood yet. I don't see him as someone who would remember what he looked like as a child right off the bat. Devlin will need to do something that reminds him of himself.
Culture and sadism totally makes sense and seems to sum up Voldemort's dialogue in cannon - glad I seemed to capture it as well.

If you teared up at the Lily Scene then you better have some tissues when I rerequest for the next chapter - we get to see Geoffrey's memories!

Oh, Geoffrey was very surprised that Devlin had ever been a seemingly normal boy. If Harry hadn't shown him that, I think Geoffrey would have refused to tell him anything. It is the idea that Voldemort took something from Devlin that spurs him to 'save' Devlin for Harry - before he had kind of just accepted this was the way the boy was. I think it tore him up to see Devlin as the boy he should have been, ya know?

Thanks so much for the review!


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