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Review:Santa!! says:
(Sorry I'm being a bit dippy- I'm working hard on your last present and I keep forgetting to post these- I did them a while ago all ready to post on the 24th, and /well/ that didn't go too well.)

Ho ho ho, Santa is back. And ready to roll on your lovely story!

I thought it was fantastic how you managed to get at the time gap using your third person narration, instead of writing 'five years later' or the date or something at the top. It really helped the narrative flow.

I also very much liked the part about Ron's sibling thoughts; I never really thought about him not being paired of with another of them, but I suppose its true that he doesn't really naturally have a play mate. I can vouch that younger sisters aren't to fab, and they always ruin your games (at least in my experience ;))

I notice that your chapters are quite short- it's not necessarily a bad thing, although I do like your writing, and its a pity to have to finish so soon, particularly as my wifi is quite temperamental, so I can't always move onto the next chapter immediately.

Like the last chapter, your final paragraph was extremely good. It created forshadowing for those who had not read any of the books, or seen the films. (Though I doubt they'd be on hpff if this were the case. I suppose that brings me to say that I honestly think these could stand alone, as an original fiction.) On the other hand, it's not only an interesting perspective, but a good laugh for those ho have!

I hope you have a wonderful 2013,
Santa!!

Author's Response: Younger sisters always ruin everything. It's a fact of life. My little sister (for example) lost/chewed on/ate/damaged every single board game I ever owned as a child. Granted, I'm sure my older brother would have some things to say about me, so I should probably watch it ;)

Anyway, thanks for another lovely review :) I do tend to write really short chapters. It's something I'm trying to work on: adding more detail and description.

Thanks for all of your sweet comments. I'm really glad that you seem to be enjoying this story.


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