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Review:peanuts11 says:
This simply broke my heart.

I started off really wary thinking that Victoire had doubts about the marriage and that it would be really hard to read but I just loved it.

I think Victoire could have had her outbursts in stages. For example, perhaps she's in a state of shock then she has an outburst then she's quiet and reflective and there could have been anecdotes of her relationship with Teddy then she starts filtering out all her feelings.

I felt like it was a bit too fast for me. However, that being said, people respond to things in very different ways.

I loved the way you expressed Victoire's thoughts, especially when she said, "You killed me, Dominique, you ruined me." That was so emotive.

I also really liked the characterisation of Vic and Dom and opposites. Victoire's more open and Dom's messy but secretive. It made me feel like I knew them as characters and had been reading this for ages rather than just in a oneshot.

I also think there could have been more action. Like Victoire throwing things or sitting in the fetal position in the corner just so it wasn't so speech driven but that doesn't even matter too much.

Aaah, loved it. I could gush forever.

:D

peanuts11

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

It broke my heart while writing it too, *sigh*.

Its a relief to know that even though you started out wary, you ended up loving it =)

Hmm, I am sorry if it was a little too fast for you and you'd rather Vic had had her outbursts in stages, but as you said people respond differently to situations. In my mind, I felt like she'd have reacted this way, but thanks for the suggestion!

I tried to make this as emotive as possible over all, so its good to know certain emotive parts stood out to you.

Its great to know that you could grasp Vic and Dom's characters so well through just a little one-shot. It makes me feel good as a writer :)

Hmm, thanks for your comments. If I ever do an edit, I'll think about more action.

But I am happy you liked this, thanks a ton!


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