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Review:Secret Santaa strikes again! says:
Gah!! This is, again, an absolutely stellar chapter. It is really, really beautiful and i love how you've written Lavender. It has this really tragic feeling to it that really gets into your soul. She tries to be so strong, so brave, but it just feels like she's walking on this very small line between being okay and being a disaster. Or, at least, being able to admit that maybe things aren't as good as she wants them to be. I thought the line of her staying silent when they were putting the photo's up was especially moving. That whole scene actually, where she's thinking of the unchangingness of muggle photo's. It's a nice connection because she probably fears that she cannot change, cannot move on from this.

I really love how you describe things here. It's so moving, how she feels disconnected from everything, how this psychological progression might not be going like she planned and when her father touches her shoulder briefly, how she feels like she'll float away. Your choice of wording is absolutely brilliant and all the metaphors and imagery you use really put the reader in the mood for reading and getting into the story. It makes what you write that much more real and alive.

I liked the flashback and how that tied in with her thirst to prove herself a Gryffindor. That was a really neat theme here because I think many readers may think Lavender an airhead but this focus on how she was a Gryffindor and was brave in her own way was really neat. You continue to flesh Lavender out as a character, having enough of her past self here so we still feel connected to the Lavender from the books, and this Lavender which has changed so much after the war.

Anyway, really lovely chapter and work here! This is a really great piece of writing that you should be very proud of, even if it isn't getting as many reviews as perhaps your TAOB did or something. This is a masterpiece in itself. :P

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