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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Hello, SC. I'm here (a little late) for the TGS Review Swap.

I did read chapter one, but I really wanted to make sure I had the time to review chapters 2 and 3 since they had less reviews on them. I hope that's okay. And I have to say right up front, I was really excited to see this story is next-gen. It's my absolute favorite era to read. And I've only ever read a few Molly-centric fics before, so this definitely caught my attention right away.

This was a really interesting chapter (as was the first). I love the way you're playing with the boundaries of reality. Clearly Molly's grief has unhinged her, or else brought out some underlying psychosis, and yet there are parts of the chapter that are very grounded and true to life, which only serves to make the parts that are "questionable" all the more vivid.

I think one of my favorite points in the chapter was:

-- I can see in my head a reflection of what will be once the director shouts cut and the dance stops. I dream of that moment. That moment where I will stop living someone else's life, where the curtain will be called and I'll step out and she'll be clapping because we've done a smashing job.

What a great metaphor for the way Molly must be feeling -- like an actor in her own life. As if only someone could just yell "Cut!" and life can go back to being normal again. And I love how you weaved that idea throughout the chapter, with all the references to the stage and the cinema.

I also thought all the repeated references to "blue lips" was wonderfully effective. It's so true how in tragedy, we can focus in on the most unusual of details. Of all the things that could haunt her, it's the thought of the blue lips that she just can't seem to let go of.

Well, this story is definitely off to a great start. I'm off right now to read the next chapter!

Author's Response: Hey! Sorry for the delay in responding to this!!

thank you so much for your review! I really appreciate you comments on these last chapters!

The thing with psychosis or any mental illnesses is that most of the time the person can be completely normal at times which is why it can be easy to hide (at times). There are going to be moments where a person is grounded in reality and as you said it makes those more unhinged moments even more chilling. Think of some of the most horrible events recently the Newtown or the Aurora shooting. Generally speaking many said the person seemed normal or they were shocked but as people look deeper things start making sense some of the quirks don't just seem like quirks anymore but a more underlying illness perhaps. That's just an example, not that all illnesses will lead to violence either. Anyway, that's a bit of a rant, back to the actual story... I guess that's why i chose to try and portray it this way where she's grounded and yet there are definitely moments where she comes apart and the contrast as you said does lead to highlighting those breaks in her mind.

I'm really pleased you liked the metaphor of the actor/stage. I wasn't sure if was too cliche or a dry one to use though i'm pleased you connected with it and how it signified everything she was feeling at the moment.

Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm really pleased you've enjoyed this story so far :P


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