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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
HELLO!

Hey! Its me, Gabbie with your requested review and even though its not Georgelina, I had to read it anyway since I love your work. Hear that? Confessions of love in the air...(Though I'm in love with various other authors at the moment, I could squeeze you in next to my friend Cassie Potter. Hehehe.)
Anyhoo, so Quidditch! Ugh, I get so nervous whenever I try to write it and I have to give you credit for opening with it. Me, being the coward that I am, would have just sleazed my way around it without any detail.
But I loved the way you handled this. James walking out onto the pitch with his team, encouraging his mates and having that confidence was wonderful. Also, I just LOVED how you added in that bit about Lily being the crowd, something about the way you wrote that made me sigh. Girlish imaginings of course.
I wasn't sure by how you wrote this if they were together, if they WERE going to get together and I liked that. You focused first hand on the game, which I could see was a tad hard for you on some parts but smoothed out very well. James actually getting hurt was a good twist too because usually they'd have just won the game amid cliched cheers and confetti. He's honestly human and I'm glad that you showed that.
Anyhoo, Lily! Haha, I thought it was funny that she was fussing at him while he was knocked out and a little sweet too that she came to see him. The fact that she was worried really brought her feelings into perspective. I was able to gather that she didn't hate him as much as either of them would have thought and it was subtle, but wonderful.
James's conversation with her was funny, mature and flirtatious all at once. It was great to see that he wasn't trying to play up the "wounded victim" bit and manipulate her. And I think that came across for Lily, which was probably why she didn't know how to react to him, it showed a different side to his character that she had probably never noticed. ;)
The hopeful ending is great too. We all know of course what happens in the future but at that moment, you do wonder. How will the party go? What will Lily say? Will they become friends and perhaps something more by the time the year is out? :D
I liked that you didn't answer those questions but left us to wonder and want more. ;)
So, I loved this and I'm glad that you wanted me to read it. Keep up the good work!
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Hello lovely :)

Gah - yes I know! I found Quidditch ridiculously hard to write but I had to have the match in there to go with my plot! I ended up making it shorted than I orginally intended and I still don't think it's quite right but hopefully the latter parts make up for that.

I did enjoy writing James talking to his team mates though. As I was writing I couldn't help but have Oliver in the back of my mind...

Haha, I'm glad you enjoyed the James getting injured part. I just thought it was very him - he's selfless like Harry.

In my head when I was writing the conversation, this is the start of their beautiful relationship. James is finally mature and Lily can no longer resist his good looks :)

I'm really glad you loved it! I really appreciate the lovely review :) It made my day to read it!!

Thank you :)
Lauren

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