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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
This is awesome! It's been a long time since this kind of plot has been exciting and interesting to me, but your story gives the Marauder era and the Lily/James ship new life. I read this prologue with a giant grin on my face, knowing how it was going to end, but still enjoying every minute of Lily's rational explanations and her friends' perfect revenge. This story is going to be so much fun!

Lily's characterization in this is probably one of the most creative I've seen. She's a challenging character to write at the best of times because it's easy to fall into cliche, but you're far from that point here. I love the idea of making her a scientific genius (at least in her eyes :P). What's great about the way you portray this is how she compares her Muggle knowledge of chemistry and mathematics with the shortcuts and weird things that are instead learned by magical folk. She's proud to be a Muggleborn in this respect because it opens up the world in different ways for her - but of course, she restricts herself by being so rational. One just knows that she's going to become emotionally compromised because of this - how this happens will be the fun part. ;)

What's also great about this story is it's humour. You've hit on just the right style and language to make this scene hilarious. Lily may be brilliant with numbers, but she's also incredibly blind. You don't overplay this fact, which is perfect - it's hinted at subtly, even ironically, enhancing the humour of Lily's situation. She's accidentally set herself up, and her friends will definitely be enjoying themselves (unless/until Lily succeeds, that is, haha).

"It was mental. But it's for science!" *bursts into giggles* I'm looking forward to updates on this story - it's a delight to read so far!

Author's Response: Omg Susan I love you XD You always leave the nicest, most detailed reviews, seriously.

I'm so glad that you found in interesting! One of my biggest worries about doing ships like Jily is that I'll write them too cliche, which no one wants to read about, so I'm happy that I managed to put a different spin on something that's done so often.

I also hate it when people write muggleborn characters without having them hold on to any significant part of their heritage. Like, their whole world has become magic and they don't care about anything else, even though the majority of them go home and spend their summers with muggles, and they all spent the first eleven years of their life living without magic. So I wanted Lily to still have a strong connection with the world which she grew up in, and I'm glad that came across well :)

And you have no idea how much that humour comment means to me XD I'm usually awful at writing stories that aren't filled with angst, so to hear it didn't sound like I was trying too hard to write something funny is a wonderful thing to hear.

Thank you so much for the kind words, Susan. You really are too nice to me :D

xx Molly

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