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Review:Your Secret Santa says:
Hi there

Wow. This story was really good. It's quite different from your other stories, but I really liked it. I have never read a story like this one, but I thoroughly enjoyed it. Once again I love that you use underloved and minor characters.

In this story you again show your gift when it comes to description and characterization. What I actually love the most about Susan is that she's not like most characters from this time period. She is not your typical heroine. She seems sweet and kind, which is the way I imagine her being from the books. But you can also see she faces her own demons, her own fears. She wants to follow her dad's wish, but she also wants to carry on her family's legacy. At the same time, she's also afraid. It's an inner struggle, a difficult choice, and you write that really well. She doesn't want to accept that the Carrows are controlling her school, that the people who killed her family is taking over the wizarding world, but she's too scared to fight back.

You can't help but empathize with Susan. She has just lost her family, the people who killed them are taking over the wizarding world, and she is, understandably, scared. I like how astronomy is almost like her escape from it all, something that makes her momentarily forget about all her problems. When I want to forget my problems, I usually read a book. It's actually quite similar, since Susan is more interested in the stories behind the stars. Even more interesting is the fact that she seems more braver when it has something to do with this hobby. She, in some ways, oppose the Carrows when she goes to the Astronomy Tower after curfew, but she didn't seem so scared then. It's like she needs to watch the stars. It's more than a hobby.

I also love how Hannah is so determined to fight back. She actually reminded me a lot of Neville. Both wanted to stand up for what's right, and both acting like leaders. At the same time, you can tell that Hannah is really concerned for her friend. I just really liked how you characterized her. It's quite different from how most people portray her, but I like this version more.

I also like how Susan, in the end, finds the courage to fight back. In the end she becomes a hero like the rest of her family.

- Your Secret Santa

Author's Response: Hey!

Thank you so much! I love how you seem to have really gotten this piece and where able to see and feel with Susan. You hit spot on with all of your comments of what Susan was going through and the demons that were at her doorstep. I love minor characters. I really do because a lot of them there is so much to explore and Susan is just one of the many that have a massive story behind them. I'm really pleased you felt like i captured some of it well.

I agree with you that astronomy for her was more than just a hobby. It was her escape and her way to be brave. It was a small thing but she relied so heavily on it that she would do anything to be able to look at the stars. She just needed to transfer that feeling she had to the real life situation around her and be able to use her disregard of the rules and fear to see the sky with the Carrows.

Thank you so much for your review!

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