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Review:Your Secret Santa says:
Hi again

Okay, I'll just start by saying something I forgot to say in my review of Whispers in the Night. I actually love Molly II, and I absolutely love how you write her. This story was actually very different from what I've read from you so far, but I loved it. You have this amazing gift when it comes to description and characterization. At the same time, you find a balance. You don't have too much of either, but enough to create the mood you want for your story.

Like in WIN (I'm shortening it, so I'll just call it that instead Whispers of the Night) you see a broken Molly. Once again, you manage to write this well. You stay true to the characterization you have in WIN, but you still add some new traits as well. I love how you keep using the word: Perfect. I just imagine people around her thinking of her as just that. But in this story, you focus on the negative side of this. How Molly almost resents herself for appearing to be so perfect, like she wants nothing more than to be imperfect. She just seems broken and lost, and you can't help but empathize with her.

While Molly is in a very similar situation in WIN, I think she is somewhat different here. She is broken in both stories, but broken in different ways. Here she seems unable to comprehend what happened between them, and why Lysander wants to end things. Unable to understand, it's like she jumps to the conclusion that her perfect-ness is the reason for it happening. It's a new side of Molly, but I loved this side too.

I didn't really understand why they broke up, but that may have been your intention. But from the little that Lysander said, I'm thinking they simply grew apart. When things are too good or too perfect, they tend to break or bend easier. That's what my mum used to tell me, and it's correct in many situations. But what I love about Lysander is that it's seems like he's given up on her, like he really wanted to make it work but no longer believes they are meant-to-be. It's very realistic.

Another great story. Loving this one too :)

- Your Secret Santa

Author's Response: I've been blown away by your reviews. I really have been because they are just so nice and i don't really expect that. I'm really pleased you like my writing style. I'm always happy when someone thinks i have a balance. It's not something I really consciously think about when I write and it's always after that i worry that it's too much on the descriptive side or too much angst or too much something. But i'm glad it works for you.

Why they broke up wasn't as important to the plot as her reaction to it. Her complete loss of what to as it didn't fit into her world. It completely made her loss it to an extent, the fact that she doesn't understand it was why i wanted to write this side of, the broken pieces that can never really put together again. They cracked, they stopped working but she didn't see it. I think you summed it up fairly well with why they just didn't work anymore.

Thank you so much for your thoughts!

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