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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Hello, academica. I'm here (somewhat shamefully late) returning the favor for the Holiday Review Swap. I had a hard time deciding which story to review as I've heard so many good things about both, but since I read a few bits of pieces of Post Scriptum during the Dobbys, I decided to go with this one. And I'm so glad I did. I love stories that stand out from the pack.

The writing in this was lovely. It really captures you right from the start. It is (no pun intended) rather haunting. The attention to the ornate nature of the frame, the tiara, the peals on the crown... you focus in on just the right details to build a beautiful but melancholy image.

The language throughout was also perfect, especially considering the chapter is all being told from the point of view of a very old ghost. Use of the word 'behold' instead of 'see,' and 'coronet' instead of 'crown.' It all added to the sense that he's been around for a very long time without being so over-the-top old-fashioned that it's distracting for the reader. It had just the right amount of formality to fit both the mood and the "age" of the character.

And I just have to say how much I loved the line "...simply wished to allow himself to waste away like all other men." So simple and yet so sad. You've captured this sense of resignation and longing without jumping off the cliff of self-pity.

Overall, this was a lovely chapter. I only wish it had been longer so I could have had more to enjoy. The story of the Bloody Baron and the Grey Lady was one of my favorite revelations from DH. I'm definitely going to try hard to come back and read some more soon.

A Happy Belated Holiday to you, and thanks so much for tagging me for the review swap.

Author's Response: Hi A_Wiz! Thanks for stopping by!

I'm really happy to hear that you liked the imagery, as that was obviously the focus of this little prologue. It's certainly not uplifting, but I enjoyed trying to get inside the Baron's head and imagine how painful it would be for him to stand before the Mirror of Erised.

I'm also pleased that you felt the language and style were appropriate given the era. I struggled initially with the degree of formality to use in this story, and I'm pretty happy with the result. That line in particular seems to tug at the heartstrings for a lot of readers, and I'm happy that you found it conveyed a good amount of sympathy without going over the top. It's interesting how the Mirror can inspire such diverse reactions in those who stand before it; for Ron, he could dream of a brilliant future, but for Harry and the Baron, they desire things which they can never have.

I do hope you return, and if so, that you enjoy the rest of the story. Thanks for the review!

-Amanda


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