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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Hello, again. I'm back with your second holiday review. Sorry it's taken me so long to post it.

This was another solid chapter. I really like that you're taking you time developing the romance in this story. I think a lot of people may be turned off by Dramione because many times, the stories just jump right into the relationship, essentially asking readers to forget everything they know about the characters from the books. But so far, you're really staying true to the characters, even if the story is not canon.

I thought you did an exceptionally good job with the characterization of Draco. I love when he calls Hermione the "Mudblood wasn't even good enough for the blood traitor." Ouch! Now that is definitely something I could image Draco saying. It's cruel on so many levels.

I also liked how you had him thinking nearly the same thing as Hermione -- about being afraid she would blab to the rest of the school about catching him crying in a classroom. It was a nice way to introduce into the reader's mind that perhaps the two main characters arenít as polar opposite as we might think.

I did notice one grammar-related item. In some of your dialogue, you've got periods where there should be commas. It doesn't make the story hard to read or anything, but since I saw it in a few places, I thought I'd mention it.

Sorry again for the delay in posting your review. Thank you so much for taking the time to tag me twice for the review swap. Happy writing in the New Year :)

Author's Response: Aw A_Wiz this review just makes me so happy! First I'm so glad that you have come on as my new beta! But this review is just so sweet! The fact that you think that I've done a pretty good job with their characterizations is just amazing! Its really a huge compliment for me! I'll take a look at those periods and get them changed over to commas, so thanks for pointing that out! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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