Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Hello, again. I'm back with your second holiday review. Sorry it's taken me so long to post it.

This was another solid chapter. I really like that you're taking you time developing the romance in this story. I think a lot of people may be turned off by Dramione because many times, the stories just jump right into the relationship, essentially asking readers to forget everything they know about the characters from the books. But so far, you're really staying true to the characters, even if the story is not canon.

I thought you did an exceptionally good job with the characterization of Draco. I love when he calls Hermione the "Mudblood wasn't even good enough for the blood traitor." Ouch! Now that is definitely something I could image Draco saying. It's cruel on so many levels.

I also liked how you had him thinking nearly the same thing as Hermione -- about being afraid she would blab to the rest of the school about catching him crying in a classroom. It was a nice way to introduce into the reader's mind that perhaps the two main characters aren’t as polar opposite as we might think.

I did notice one grammar-related item. In some of your dialogue, you've got periods where there should be commas. It doesn't make the story hard to read or anything, but since I saw it in a few places, I thought I'd mention it.

Sorry again for the delay in posting your review. Thank you so much for taking the time to tag me twice for the review swap. Happy writing in the New Year :)

Author's Response: Aw A_Wiz this review just makes me so happy! First I'm so glad that you have come on as my new beta! But this review is just so sweet! The fact that you think that I've done a pretty good job with their characterizations is just amazing! Its really a huge compliment for me! I'll take a look at those periods and get them changed over to commas, so thanks for pointing that out! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Submit Report:  





All stories remain the property of their authors and must not be copied in any form without their consent. This is an unofficial, not for profit site, and is in no way connected with J.K. Rowling, Scholastic Books or Bloomsbury Publishing or Warner Bros. It is not endorsed by any of the aforementioned parties. Rights to characters and their images is neither claimed nor implied. The use of photographs and/or the likeness of any person contained herein does not imply endorsement of any kind. Any depictions were obtained through publically available sources and therefore fall under fair use. Although we may provide links to other websites, we are not responsible for any material at these sites. You acknowledge that you link to these other websites at your own risk. All original administrative content is copyright of the site owner and must not be copied in any form (electronic or otherwise) without the prior consent of the siteowner. ©2000-2012 Fanfictionworld.net

[terms of service] [report abuse] [privacy policy] [site credits]
 
 

navigation

home

search HPFF
read stories
write stories
login/register
get help
site links
forums
podcasts
Terms of Service
Site Rules
contact us

  
 
 

categories & genres

Genre:
- crossover
- drama
- fluff
- general
- horror/dark
- humor
- mystery
- romance
- action/adventure
- angst
- au
- young adult

Popular Pairings:
- harry/ginny
- ron/hermione
- james/lily
- draco/hermione
- more...

Format:
- one-shot
- short story
- novella
- novel
- short story collection
- songfic

  
 
 

quick links

my account
ToS
random story
site rules
help
merchandise


  
 
 

fanfictionworld.net