|Review:||Ravenclaw Secret Santa says:|
Hm, very interesting chapter! I know I mentioned in my very first review that I rarely seek out Marauder stories. Therefore, I have not read a very large number of them and do not have a vast number of stories to compare this one with. However, I do have to say that I am enjoying James a lot in this story, and I almost never like him. You are doing a good job with characterization. All the characters seem realistic. They seem ordinary. I can relate to each of them in some way or another. They all have some sort of flaw (maybe I should call them immaturities), but it just comes out as a part of their personalities, rather than a "LOOK AT ME, I'M BAD AT POTIONS AND I DON'T TRUST PEOPLE SO I'M NOT A MARY SUE" sort of thing.
Anyway, it was a good talk that James and Beth had. The way you write James reminds me a bit of Harry in some ways, sort of like a nosier and less moody version of him.
You used this chapter to mop up quite a bit of time and move things along, much as JKR does in her books (and as lots of authors do).
I find I don't really have a whole lot to say about it, I guess. Like I said, I really enjoyed the conversation between Beth and James. James was a lot more understanding than I expected him to be, but you explained it well, drawing the parallel with his crush on Lily.
So. Beth and Severus have encountered one another in the hallway again. It's almost like they're back at square one. :P
Author's Response: I heard that from someone else, actually, that they like James in this story more than in other stories they've read. And I'm so glad! I've actually come to like him a lot more myself, as it was necessary to include him here, and writing the James/Lily bits of this plotline's become one of my favorite parts. It always throws me for a loop a bit when I think I'm writing about Harry's parents, though. :P And I LOVE what you said about the flaws in my characters, too, because that is exactly what I've been striving for in writing them since day one. You've made me feel more at ease about it, more sure of what I'm doing, then anyone else yet has. :)
I see James as definitely being a lot like his son, and even sometimes try and channel Harry when writing James. After all, if people say that Harry's a lot like his parents, then shouldn't we write them that way?
I'm glad you enjoyed the conversation he had with Beth, and that I explained his understanding nature well, too. These are all things I love hearing, and I'm so happy that you've thought to say them at all! Thank you very much for yet another thought-out and extremely lovely review!