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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Hello, AC. I'm here returning the favor for the Holiday Review Swap. You have so many stories on your page it was hard to choose, but since I've read bits and pieces of so many of the other ones, I thought I'd give this one a go. I'm always drawn to stories that have somewhat less common main characters, and I've not read a lot of Lavender-centric stories before, so this made for a nice departure from the norm.

This was a really haunting first chapter. You created such an interesting atmosphere here. I liked the short interjections that seemed to give Lavender's thoughts a disjointed feeling -- hinting at a level of mental instability. Interrupting her thoughts on the hospital/Pye with the lines "They'd won. She'd been unconscious..." made it feel like she was almost having flashbacks to that moment in the battle. Yet I like how you balance it out with mentions of her chatting with Parvati, as if there is still some of the old Lavender left inside her, and also showing that world keeps moving on.

You had some lovely lines throughout the chapter. My favorite was the bit about her being a jigsaw puzzle with a piece missing. What an effective way to convey how she must be feeling -- physically whole, save for the scars, but still somehow broken and incomplete.

And the bits about Pye "talking psychology to her," and people who've survived war having "nothing ties them down anymore" were really wonderful too. The first gives such a great insight into Pye -- all fresh and eager and not yet cynical about his profession. The latter is sad and such a good description of how people who've gone through trauma sometimes no longer feel they fit into the world the same way anymore. And of course the ending. You get the sense throughout that Lavender isn't right, but that last line really adds a sense of foreboding.

Thanks for tagging me in the review exchange. I really enjoyed reading this chapter. Sorry it took me so long to leave you your review.

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