|Review:||Ravenclaw Secret Santa says:|
Well, of course, I already knew what the overall outcome was going to be here, but it was still fun to read. You certainly managed to imbue it with plenty of tension and excitement. It was definitely gripping, even with a known outcome. Also, I thought they way Severus reacted, as well as the interaction between him, Beth, and James seemed realistic in terms of their characterizations.
I found one sentence that didn't quite make sense. Maybe there is a missing word or two? "The sentence caused Severus distinctly uncomfortable and out of place . . . "
I especially enjoyed the scene at the end, when James confronted Sirius. I thought that was very well written. I was slightly surprised that he didn't mention anything about Remus. After all, I'm pretty sure Remus would feel terrible if he killed or hurt someone, so Sirius's actions very nearly caused great hurt to one of his closest friends as well as someone he doesn't really care about. At the same time, going too much into that might have cluttered the message, and James did focus in on the important point: Sirius did something stupid and thoughtless that nearly resulted in tragedy.
So now Severus knows all about the secret. That changes things, doesn't it? I also wonder what this means for Beth and Severus. This was probably my favorite chapter yet, and I'm interested to see how the changes are going to play out.
Author's Response: I'm glad you thought that it was still fun to read! :) I took the liberty of changing a few things, I'm afraid -- in reality, I'm pretty sure this event happened earlier in canon than I placed it here. But I couldn't resist writing this bit, and anyway, ITB's a bit of an AU already!
I'm seriously so glad you're reading this; you're catching a lot of the little typos I've missed in my many edits of these chapters. Thank you so much! ♥
James's confrontation scene is actually my favorite in this whole chapter, and I think that's because they're such good friends the rest of the time, it's almost scary to see them like this here. You know? But friends, even best friends, do fight, and I'm sure James and Sirius had their share of quarrels. I get where you're coming from on the whole Remus front, but I think he was just so single-track about how stupid Sirius was that Remus wasn't at the front of his mind, if that makes any sense.
Severus knowing about the secret does indeed change things! I'm pleased to hear that this was your favorite chapter thus far, and to know that it IS getting more interesting as you go. :P I'm a bit behind on responses, I know, but I really do appreciate your leaving all these reviews for me!