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Review:Ravenclaw Secret Santa says:
Haha, yes, here we do hear from Beth! Also, I totally relate to her basically feeling, "Whyyy did I say that???" I feel like that all the time. I swear, I have a chronic case of foot-in-mouth syndrome. I'm a little surprised that she had no inkling as to why Severus might want to speak to Lily, though. She never noticed they were friends before? Then again, it is only from Severus's POV that we have even heard that they were friends. Considering his awkward social tendencies, they very well may never have interacted much in public (especially lately, obviously), so it may not have been apparent to anyone not paying close attention. By all this I mean that Severus may have placed great importance on their conversations and interactions, especially when compared to less meaningful interactions/conversations with others, but to outsiders looking in, it may not have seemed all that exceptional. I hope I'm making sense here. :P

I spotted a typo regarding Peter's homework: "trample by a herd of centaurs" instead of "trampled."

James is teaching Lily about Quidditch so she can watch him better? That arrogant little so-and-so. Sorry, that just puts me off, at least the way it was described.

Well, there I was assuming Sirius was just up to no good, maybe already setting in motion something nasty to do with Severus. Guess I was wrong about that one, though. To me, when Sirius revealed he had overheard news about the secret society, that was the most interesting part of the chapter.

Sirius clearly is extremely excited. James almost seemed as if he'd been waiting for this news, or that it wasn't unexpected. No obvious excitement, but less reservation than expressed by the others. Remus, as always, was the voice of reason; Beth, the cautious one. Peter? Well, there was hardly a peep from Peter after his initial skepticism.

I hadn't considered that Beth would be able to press the Whomping Willow's knot in her Animagus form, but of course it makes sense. Perhaps it is a good thing to have more than one person in the group who is able to do that. I really enjoyed reading the descriptions of how Beth and James were enjoying their Animagus forms.

Oh no. And there I was thinking Sirius hadn't been up to no good. :( Guess I was wrong about that one.

Author's Response: Beth has a lot of moments in the course of this book (and the next two, really) where she has a bit of foot-in-mouth syndrome, and I'm afraid to say that's heavily drawn from my own life. :P I'm so bad at that! As for her noticing that Lily was friends with Severus, I was always very much under the impression that it was a more private sort of friendship, theirs. Add into that the fact that before this year, Severus never really talked to Beth, and I don't think it's too far-fetched for Beth to have thought they were anything more than acquaintances.

Ah, another typo! Thank you so much -- this story's been completed for about a year now, and still there are things to fix.

Sirius is almost always up to no good, unfortuantely. :( But I think you see (saw?) where this is going! He's an easily excitable man, and that's one of the things I love writing most about him: I see him as being so bouncy and energetic, and it always adds more fun into even the more serious scenes, no pun intended.

I seriously can't tell you how happy these reviews are making me! This is truly one of the best presents. ♥ I'm so flattered. Looking forward to responding to more from you soon!

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