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Review:Secret Santa! says:
Ho Ho! Santa's back ;)

I haven't read a story about the ways children deal with death on HPFF before, and I've definitely read a lot - so well done for originality. I felt that you really showed the innocence of Frank's age in this story - his confusion, emotions and reliance on his parents was spot on to a boy of his age. He was very inquisitive and the repetitive 'why?' is perfect for a child looking to solve the world - it really helped give your characters colour. I also really liked how he behaved with Alice - you've really set up their relationship for the next story.

As a minor detail, I'm not 100% sure that there are 'funeral homes' in England. I'm English, and I haven't come across one so far. We generally have morgues which are then transferred on the day of the funeral to whichever belief you support i.e. church graveyard, cremation etc. Just a very small thing :) I love the idea of having a 'nanny' at the funeral place though. Young children always cry at the wrong moment! We had a nativity the other day and Mary and Joseph started having a tug-of-war fight over Jesus. Hilarious. Not sure if that's real in your country, or you've made the position up - but kudos! :P

The characterisations of our canon characters was brilliant. I love that you included Harry and Ginny with the two young boys - it's rare that I see a story without Lily popping up. What was really clear throughout this was the innocence reflected from the children to the adults. You made the adults almost child-like in the unsurity, almost like they were looking for adults to tell them what to do or say.

This was a sad and thought-provoking chapter and I think you really set this up for the next story (which I'm very excited to read the next chapter of!).

Great job! Santa :)

Author's Response: Hello!

Wow, thank you :) I'm glad you liked it and all the details! I originally was planning on writing the other story first (when Alice and Frank were older) but then I got this idea from a challenge and it seemed like the perfect opportunity to introduce them! I'm happy that you can see where they tie in together (:

Yeah, I've heard that a few times from reviews! I guess I should do more research on things like that before I post my stories :P I'll probably try adding in some more details about the funeral home and maybe adding something to my authors note about it. Thanks for the heads up though!

Ahh thank you for all the compliments! I'm really happy you liked it and that you're interested in the long run of Frank and Alice's lives :P


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