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Review:Secret Santa says:
I'm loving this so far! There are so many things to love, actually. Firstly I love the character Nathalie and how you introduce her here. I like it how you show all her insecurity about going away and about going to a school and world she doesn't know much about and where she down't know anyone. Almost anyone would be nervous and a little afraid. I would anyway. And I would probably do the same as she did and pass the compartment with Rose, Albus and Scorpius and go for one with no one or just one person or other people who look like they don't know each other. ;) She however goes on bravely and tries not to show her nervousness. One thing about her thoughts though, that I noticed. As it's from her point of view I thought the word "muggle" seemed a little out of place when she was at the station as she hasn't known about magic for that long and has maybe heard the word "muggle" once or twice. She's probably think of them as something like "ordinary people" and the "ordinary world" at this time. But that's just a tiny tiny little thing.

I liked the beginning of the story. It pulled me right in and made me curious. I wondered first if we were seeing a time when a character did not yet know she was a witch as she was maybe going to a school in London. But then it turned out that she was going to Hogwarts after all. Your writing flows well too and it's a pleasure to read.

It's really a difficult sort of chapter to write, as it's a kind of chapter many attempt and things that happened to Harry too. But I think you did really well as it was still interesting with the train ride and the sorting. I was afraid that Nathalie would sit in the train with the people she would become best friends with and I was happy she didn't and I think the jump from there to the lake was good. We didn't need to know more about what she did in the train and who she talked to or didn't.

Haha the lake scene was fun! I think I'm not so fond of Rose so far, but I liked the boys. But probably she had a reason to be so snappy about people seeing her as famous. I can imagine that some magazines would have written about some of the trio's kids getting to Hogwarts that year, so everyone would have known they were coming. And Harry would probably have been mad about it too. (and now I'm starting to imagine that scenario and sort of want to write about it) Anyway, I loved to see you write about the characters we sort of know (or at least know their families) from another person's point of view. They'll probably seem a bit different when we get to know them more and see them more. It's great that everything is coloured by Nathalie's background as muggleborn, just like Harry too wondered about everything. But still it's in many ways different from how Harry saw things. Oh and I loved to see Neville too!

So a great start! :) I liked the story summary too by the way. It made me chose this story more than for example characters or era.

Happy Holidays! :)

Author's Response: I'm sorry for the awfully late response -- I've been on hiatus, see -- but thank you so much for the lovely, detailed reviews!

I'm definitely going to take the whole muggle versus ordinary people thing into account when I revamp this story, I never really thought about it and you were the first to mention it, so. I always get so tired of the same scenes showing the main character just jumping in and becoming instant best friends with the other characters because I simply could not see it happening in real life, so I'm glad you liked that part!

Oh, seems like a lot of people aren't too fond of Rose xD she doesn't seem to make a very good impression, though I promise it should change as the story goes on! That would actually be a really interesting scene to write about, hmm... But I digress. Thank you very, very much for the review, and I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter of this! It's actually one I'm really proud of :D


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