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Review:Elf on the TGS shelf says:
Your Lily is seems so sweet/adorable! And I love the strained attitude between the Potters and Malfoys. I think it fits well that they'd be nothing but polite, but still not over friendly. I'd love to see that dinner actually happen :P

I think your doing such an awesome job with the boys' friendship. They all seem to compliment one another very well, and it seems very natural.

I think you could have lengthened the second section and made this two separate chapters, because both sections are kind of blurring in my head and I think they'd seem more clear if they continued the pattern of their own chapters.

Maybe adding more at the beginning of the third year train ride, like before they are on the train talking with some of the other students that aren't one of the three boys about what they did over the summer.. it would make it feel more new maybe if we learned about what they did through a conversation. Or maybe I'm just greedy and want more chapters :P

I still really love Rose, but considering I've read your other next gen's I new I would. I like how Scorpius can't quite explain why Rose bothers him *so* much.. it's really fits for a young teenage boy who has a crush but doesn't know it.

As always, your writing absolutely addicting m'dear!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm glad you like my Lily - I have a lot of fun with her. ... also, now I'm inspired to actually write that dinner. Hmm.

I know what you mean about the two blurring together. I was afraid of getting a bit too repetitive if I drew it out more, but I've split chapters before, so when I get the chance I'll look it over to see whether I can make it work.

Thank you so much for your lovely review!

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