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Review:Secret Santa says:
Ho ho ho!

Santa is back!

I think I felt sick for Sirius, and it wasn't because I had recently apparated either. The way he counted down the seconds until he could get away from his family and all the things he had to endure up until the moment he reached the train were... well, they were disturbing to say the least. I loved how you allowed the Potters to intervene at the last minute. Perhaps this was a bit of foreshadowing of things to come?

Remus' angst was really brought out strongly in this next section. Here he was, being accused of having the perfect life, when it was anything but. Amelia seems to be holding on to some secrets of her own her. Interesting.

Peter's mishap was awful. You really made Lucius and Rosier out to be completely despicable characters here, along with them referring to him as "piggy". Just disgusting. The way that the rest of the boys came to his defense was great, along with how they found their first secret passage. I'm sure this will lead them to look for more of them.

James has finally gotten a taste of what it's like on the other side, has he? Well, that’s a good thing. I liked how you had it all play out, with him insulting Lily, but not because he'd set out to do it. He didn't know any different, and he finally realizes that maybe he should pay more attention to everyone else and their feelings. You also snuck in the admission from Sirius that his home life has changed dramatically, and not for the better. That sure gave James a lot to think about.

I'll have to agree that this was an angsty chapter, but you're doing a great job of showing everyone's individual characters and moving the story along at the same time. You're also doing a fantastic job of picking key moments in their lives to show us what it was like being a first year without giving us all that boring day-to-day stuff that doesn't matter. I mean, you still show the daily stuff, but it's neat and interesting and it matters to the story.

Another wonderful chapter. Better than the sugar cookies!

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