Hi again. Well, while this chapter didn't have the intense drama of some of the others, it did take the reader through the background details of what was going on in the character's lives at this point in time. It's always interesting to see George and Percy together. They were pretty amiable in this chapter, so it was good that you mentioned all the nasty pranks the twins would generally play on Percy. Once again, you did a great job with vividly describing settings and new characters. It definitely helped me get a clear image of the scenes in my mind as the story moved along.
I certainly did not anticipate George's question at the end of the story, but I think romance reader's will absolutely LOVE the idea and be anxious for this couple to get together as quickly as possible. I must say it's too bad that readers already know from JKR that George and Angelina will end up getting married, because if they didn't, this cliff-hanger of a question would have even more impact and serve the purpose of adding risk to the romance plot. Reader's would not only be wondering if Angelina would agree to move in, but whether it would be good or bad for the couple to take that step. Interestingly, real life statistics reveal that more than 50% of couples who live together will split up, so living together seems to spell doom for most relationships in real life. So George's proposal for Angelina to move in would create a serious risk in the story if we didn't already know the outcome according to JKR. Of course - I'll say this in a whisper - you don't have to make your story agree with her if you don't want to. EEK! Reader panic.
That said, I was pretty surprised by George's proposal for Angelina to move in with him, only because it's not what I would expect from canon - and this just my own opinion of the books, and in not in any way meant as criticism of your story, which is absolutely delightful. Okay, here's the thing - I always thought JK Rowling painted very traditional and rather old-fashioned family and marriage customs in the books, even to the point of being stereotypical. Everyone in the epilogue ended up marrying their school sweethearts, getting married, having kids, and living happily ever after. Rowling never hinted that anyone got divorced, which simply isn't realistic, nor did she mention unmarried young couples ever living together, which is a pretty common modern-day practice, but also not reflected in the books. I don't know if she left it out because it wasn't a necessary element to her story, or because she would like us to believe that the customs in the wizarding world are much more old-fashioned than our modern-day customs. Aside from couples in love, a lot of pure-blood marriages must also have been arranged, so most of those couples would probably be staying married out of a sense of duty to the pure-blood line rather than actual love - which again seems to reflect old-fashioned tradition rather than modern practice being followed in the wizard world. What I'm saying is that the books seem very out of step with reality in that regard. I certainly have nothing at all against YOUR story which portrays the way it really is for most couples when a relationship gets serious nowadays.
Anyway, now that you've teased us with this cliffhanger, I'll be interested to see where you take it from here. I'm really enjoying the way you're telling this story, and all the creative additions of your own that compliment the magical world so well. As always, I look forward to the next chapter.