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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there :D I'm just floating around the archives looking for stories to read and happened to click on this one. And am I glad I did :D

This is a beautiful piece of writing and I think you captured the survivor's guilt and long-term effects of war very convincingly. You wrote Harry's frame of mind so chillingly and beautifully. And when I finally got to the parade of the dead part I was blown away by the vividness of the imagery. The pacing of the story really picked up here, which was great as the beginning was a little laboured with all the description. But as the story progressed, I got the sense that things were becoming more and more frantic as Harry's nightmares become more vivid and traumatic before all that tension culminates in that scene at the veil.

You have a great eye for detail e.g. the cat with the bone who was actually Barty Crouch, Bode with the Devil's Snare round his neck, Cedric with the Winner's Cup. They were all very striking and somewhat terrifying images. I was really immersed in the horror of Harry's nightmares.

And that scene with Lily in it...it was a lovely touch, and a break from all the angst and tension and darkness. I really enjoyed the contrast of that moment to the rest of the story.

I loved the sense of closure as well. It was really beautifully done, a nice tranquil ending without any melodrama to such a dark story :)

I really enjoyed this piece of writing! Great work :D Hope to read more of your stories soon!

-teh

Author's Response: Hello!

I can't tell you how much I appreciate random reviewers! It's so nice to log in and see a review that I didn't anticipate. I'm glad that you enjoyed this dark little story. I used to write a lot more dark things before fluff and romance (two very addicting genres, mind you :P ) took over my brain, but it's been a long while. I don't know if you're familiar with it or not, but I sort of envisioned a distorted day of the dead sort of parade trouncing through Harry's mind. Lily Luna sort of served the role that says, no... not all death is ugly and haunting. I think this was important for Harry as he made his way to the veil to be reminded of this by his daughter.

Thank you so much ofr reviewing! :)


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