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Review:BluebirdBrigade says:
This was a gorgeous piece of fiction about feeling like you didn't fit in in the worst place - your family. The story is very relatable to anyone because so many people believe that they aren't good enough or not as clever, funny or pretty as other people but it hits you a lot harder when you are comparing yourself or are compared to people in your family who you shouldn't hate but end up hating due to this. This story is fantastic, you explain in detail all the flaws that Lucy feels in her and talk about her home, the people surrounding her and her sister. I loved the way you portrayed Molly at the end, helping her sister to strive to be better for her own sake and not for other people's, it sends out a good message to readers and its such a lovely moment between the two.

I think Percy is a harsh father and it is exactly how I would have portrayed him. Percy was always going to be a strict father, even Fred's death wouldn't of changed that so I'm glad you thought his character through and his phrases sounded realistic and pompous. Your writing is so lovely, it flows so well and so many people try and throw in odd, long words to make themselves sound like they know their Collins dictionary but when you do it all fits and gels and compliments your writing to a huge degree. Overall, this is a lovely story which is superbly heartwarming and readers are drawn to Lucy even though she doubts her qualities. Also she wants to be an actress, like me, so there's that;)

Brilliant Story,
Mazzay

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Author's Response: Aww, thank you! Your review's made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. I know I've said this isn't my favorite, but I just reread it because it's been a while, and even I have to admit, it is good. You're very right in your observations about how hard it can be to fit into a family you don't feel you fit into. She's like the next-gen's Ron. And my Lucy felt a lot of jealousy and hate towards her own sister. I'm glad you liked the end where Molly strives to help Lucy and make a real connection with her. I have to agree that it does set a good message for readers to take into consideration for their own lives.

And I think Percy was always going to be a harsh father and so naturally it'd be hard for someone like Lucy to grow up as his daughter since he's such a stickler for perfection.

I'm so happy you liked the writing style and the story overall. It means a lot to me.

Thanks so much for the lovely review!
xxEnigmaticEyes16


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