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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, Elphaba here with your requested review! :)

I enjoyed this story a lot, and don't have much in the way of critique for it. The second-person point of view was a bit jarring at first (probably because it's not used very often) but I settled into it easily enough once I got to Fred and George's conversation.

You did a very good job of maintaining George's point of view throughout, and your characterization of both him and Fred seem spot-on, to me.

The only grammatical error I found is this run-on sentence: "He opens his eyes the sadness in them is evident." Overall, your writing is very clean.

I think you balance the humor and serious very well. It's hard to pick out a favorite funny moment because there are so many. :) This might be it, though: "I've even reduced McGonagall to tears George! Actual tears! We've been trying to achieve that for years!" This definitely seems like a goal they would strive for, and I can imagine she really would have cried, and Fred really would have been amused by it.

In addition to the funny lines, there are a lot of little touching details like Fred asking George to take care of Angelina, and George telling Fred that their parents haven't been doing well.

Well done! :)

Author's Response: Thank you for such a positive review! I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

Oops... I'd not noticed that one! I'll go and edit it soon - thanks!

Haha, I liked writing that line, but then I enjoyed writing all their funny lines. I just love Fred and George!

Thanks again for a lovely review!

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