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Review:Father Christmas says:
It's your Secret Santa here ;)

First off, as a side note, can I say how perfect the dude in the chapter image is as Charlie?! AWESOME. That's how I've always imagined him! Anyway...

I really loved this! I've not seen a relationship done before between Tonks and Charlie but really, it's actually such a perfect pairing when you think about it. I thought your writing has really done them justice as a couple as well as focusing on their personalities together, like not being able to do the cleaning spells and such. Lovely!

I'm also liking where this plot is going - you kept the tension up very well by having us believe that Charlie would ditch Tonks, and I'm also intrigued by this room mate of his. Is she here to cause trouble? Hmm. Only time will tell...

I also thought your style of writing and dialogue were really good in this - it was light and natural, and fitted the tone of the story perfectly. The only thing I would do here is just run a beta over it as there were a couple of tiny tiny spelling errors. On the whole though I thought this was a really good start and I can't wait to read more!

Merry Christmas!

Author's Response: Ahhh!! You're making me squee over here.

I'm so happy you liked my Charlie! The actor is Charlie Hunnam... isn't he so gorgeous?? Swoon.

I'll definitely look over it for the errors... this was written for Dan, who does all my beta reading, but I didn't want to ask him to beta his own story and I'm super terrible at catching typos :P.

First person is really a struggle for me, so I'm incredibly excited that you thought the narration was done well!

Thank you, m'dear ♥

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