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Review:Butterbeer says:
I don't think I could have stayed awake. The sensory overload, overstimulation, stress, shock, change, after what he'd been through, I would have been comatose or had a psychotic break or something. I would have shaved his head and it would have taken much longer than a few good meals to fix his nutrition. Please know that I'm not trying to offend you, I'm just thinking what it would be like for me. I know it's your story and as far as this is concerned you are right, I don't meant to be so opinionated. I'm just caught up in the story and sharing everything. I really hope you don't mind ;) I feel like I should mention that the last few chapters have had many more grammatical errors/spelling mistakes than in the first several. I like the time you are taking to build emotion for this part of the story. I agree that it's important. He doesn't know that it's his daughter or wife yet, does he? I mean the reader can tell, even if it doesn't explicitly say. I'm pretty sure it's Evvie... That doctor was mean, SLEEP NOW lol. Wow, can you imagine going missing for 16 years. If being locked away and tortured for that long wasn't enough, add 16 years of all the things you missed. Enough to make anyone beyond depressed and hopeless. That healer is seriously a hot head though, horrible beside manner. Get her out of there! Right!?! Lol. I bet that was a fun bit to write. At least she got what she deserved but WHY was she supposed to stay away, you got me all suspicious now ;) Lol. I've been sitting here trying to remember exactly how the last chapter ended. How they wound up in the hospital and whether or not someone had took care of Marcus Boyle. I can't remember, you switched gears so fast, I got distracted immediately. Nice lol. Now I'm getting the notion that Draco took care of him. But I need to know lol. The thing is though with the whole memory retrieval thing, is that even though he might remember who he is, he hasn't worked through the assured PTSD, fears, depression, anxiety, and years of captivity and torture. He's got a ton more issues to deal with. But you recognize these things I think; his anger for example, you talk about that. And there you have it :) Thanks for the summary!!

Author's Response: That's alright I won't hold your opinions against you. I think whatever story you read, the further you get into it the more you form your own opinions of what you want to happen and how you feel it will happen, until your view becomes very changed from what the author was expressing.

I apologise for the grammatical errors/spelling mistakes but as I mentioned previously this story had no beta and I am dyslexic so I do often make mistakes and not realise them.

I like to keep things mysterious and messed up. For me, when I read something, the more shrouded in darkness it is the more I enjoy it, so I guess that's why I write that way.

He has the anger and the depression and he's been alone for the majority of those sixteen years but I didn't write him with PTSD in mind.

~Zyii


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