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Review:Butterbeer says:
So I like that you introduce her father in this chapter. It's really serious and somber. Greater than the DraMione purpose of the story, is rescuing him now. It is different though that you switch back and forth between him and her, like he knows what is happening with her or something. Maybe that really is what you were implying, Idk. I had hoped to see a more intimate relationship develop through this story, it took a long time to get together, and now that they are together, there's little character development... All connection with Blaise, and the others seems to be gone. She is no sight of Hermione in her past. It's sort of like you started the story, got to a certain point and sotpped, then came back to finish it, and did what you had to to get it done. It was stupid for her to go alone and I'd like to know how she figured everything out... I know that requires some crazy creativity, but I believe in your abilities. Ohhh so she actually wasn't alone but sort of... There was no one to watch her back, she might never be able to signal that she needs help. Rescued... The most interesting thing about the end of this chapter is that you call them "Children of the Light", I loved that expression :) Another great chapter!

Author's Response: I guess there is an implied element of both Father and Daughter knowing what is going on with each other.
All the other connections haven't gone, they've just taken a back seat as this part of the story comes to the front.
Sometimes with my stories I start with the enitial plot and then it grows into more than one plot along the way. It's just a matter of making sure that all plot lines return to one at the end.
It was also essential that Evvie go alone, no one believed her anyway, so it was part of her proving her worth but also finding the missing piece of her.
I understand that Evvie is very oc from Hermione, they are almost like two seperate people but I wanted to take Hermione from her comfort zone and thrust her into a situation that I knew would change her completely.
Thanks for your review tho, means a lot.
~Zyii


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