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Review:Secret Santa says:
Hello again! Oh, I forgot to wish you a very Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays! Hope you have a wonderful time with friends and family :D

So I seem to have made a mistake in one of my previous reviews...where I assumed that the girls' dead mother was Rowena. I have absolutely no idea why I assumed such, seeing as their mother's name was never mentioned :) I guess it must have been because the girls' surnames were Ravenclaw.

Anyway, about the real Rowena - she certainly cuts a very striking figure :D I love the description of her, and how she feels as this almost uptight severe woman who tolerates children rather than adores them. She certainly sounds like a stickler for rules and traditions and conventions and all that. Her first meeting with the girls did remind me rather strongly of Severus Snape! Especially with her high-necked black gown, her "curt nod", her sneer when she greeted Bea and the way the girls were intimidated by her. But I'm really enjoying the portrayal of her so far! This is definitely a very strong and memorable introduction of her and there's quite a lot of tension between her and the girls. I'm very interested to see how their interactions with each other pan out :)

I also loved that scene between the girls where there was a lot of lovely banter between them. It was funny and it was warm, and it provided a nice contrast to the previous scene with the austere Rowena in it. Do be careful, however, not to overdo the dialogue bits, or at least, to balance it out with narrative. You could perhaps intersperse bits of action or description between those lines of dialogue.

Other than that, this was a really well-written chapter! I've enjoyed reading it :) Can't wait to read more...am interested to see more of Godric and Salazar :D

Author's Response: Hello! Sorry it took so long for me to get responding to your reviews again!
I love how much you picked up on with Rowena! And yes, she is very uptight! Since Rowena has no children of her own, she isn't used to them. And being thrust into a house with twelve girls, some of which being so wild, it's definitely a change for her! Haha. I love your comparison of Rowena and Snape! I had never thought of that, but I absolutely love it!
The girls are really fun to write. They can say almost anything, and there are so many conflincting personalities, and it's a ton of fun!
Thank you so much for the lovely review!!!
Cassie :)


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