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I love Mistress Helga! She's a real sport :D

Another wonderful chapter! I really enjoyed this because the flow of it was delightful. Everything just happened so naturally, the girls really are a fun delightful bunch and I might have said this before - but I just love the way they look after each other. There are implications that Addie has assumed the role of mother to the rest, and Bea with her fun-loving and entertaining ways as (possibly) some sort of father figure. Well...I think :)

The king's letter to Dezzy was indeed very harsh; the degree of harshness actually did take me by surprise. I thought he would have been more slippery - diplomatic but insincere, full of political rhetoric and all that. But he was relaly outright dismissive and cruel, and I was rather surprised. But I do like to be taken by surprise and have my expectations subverted, so well done :D I also enjoyed how Dezzy's reaction to her father's letter is not one of extreme sadness or bitterness. She's just terribly resigned, and feeling quite jaded - and there's something so poignant about that moment. It was written beautifully, without melodrama and with a great deal of emotional honesty.

And the way her sisters comforted her is just wonderful! I love how Dezzy burns the letter - she does have a fiery spark in her, which is a nice touch to her characterisation :D

You've also introduced Rowena! I can't wait to see her turn up and see how she's like :D There's already an air of mystery around her about why she's been so conspicuously absent from the girls' lives. I'm looking forward to reading about her! I love how the Founders are being so slowly and carefully introduced in your story :D Your pacing is wonderful.

And well, I have many favourite quotes from this chapter, but my absolute favourite moment would be this scene:

The girls scrambled from the table, and putting on cloaks, gloves, mufflers, and scarves, ran outside into the steadily falling snow. The girls skipped about, making a dozens of little footprints across the white grounds. Soon, a snowball fight broke out, and the girls laughed, throwing snow every which way. When fingers and toes were much too cold to stay outside any longer, the girls returned to the castle for hot chocolate, so they could warm themselves by the fire. And through all of it, Dezzy didn't think about the letter from her father. Not even once.


That final paragraph was just simply delightful. It was a fantastic way to end the chapter; the language was simple but the images were vivid, and the descriptions were just right and not overdone.

OK, I'm off to read your next chapter:D

Author's Response: Hello again! Wow, such a long review! Thank you!!!
I love Mistress Helga, because she's just so sweet! She really is a good person at heart, and I think she's someone who always looks out for others. And the sisters are a blast to write! Especially when they aren't bickering, which seems to happen pretty often? Haha.
The king's letter was hard to write, mostly because he's so cold to his own daughter, especially when she really needs reassurance and proof that he still loves her. This gives her the exact opposite, and it really hurts her, even if she was almost expecting it. I'm glad that moment wasn't overdone, I tried really hard to make it emotional, but not a sob story.
Dezzy is more passionate than she lets on, I think, and her father's letter just sets her off! She has that spark in her, and I love when it comes out!
And yes, Rowena will soon be entering the girls lives! I'm glad you're enjoying the pacing, because that's one thing I'm paying extra close attention to in this story! Thank you so so much for these phenomenal reviews!!!
Cassie :)

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