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Review:Secret Santa says:
Santa here again to spread the Christmas cheer.

Okay, so I really enjoyed the second chapter to this story. It was quite a contrat to the first chapter as this had quite a lot of typical teenage character banter compared to the more serious issues of the last chapter. Those issues wfere still there in this chapter but it would have been nice if they were made a little more prominent in Sera's thoughts.

That aside, so far I really like all the characters you have. I have a feeling that there is a lot more to these characters than the reader already knows which is a good thing! Also, none of them are Mary Sue's or have similar personalities so that's good. I like the contrasting in characters and it will be nice to see how they interact with each other as the story goes on.

Once more, your description is flawless. There wasn't as much here than there was in the last chapter and yes, I might have liked a little more, but overall you had a good balance of dialogue which is also well written and dynamic.

One little thing, I noticed you used the word semester which is an American word. That was one of the only things I picked up on really.

God job though, the flow of the story was great and I really like it so far. You're a great writer!

Merry Christmas,
Santa. :)

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