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Review:Secret Santa says:
Last one for now, unfortunately, I have actually been conned into watching a movie with the family - the fact that they're using 'we're family, why not?' as an excuse and the whole reason Helena took the diadem was to spite her mother seriously strikes me as really ironic. Anyway. Onto the actual review now.

Like with all short stories, one of the most important things that come to me is how effortlessly the time passes between all of the chapters and this most definitely was no exception to the rule. I've written a short story myself and I know how difficult it is at times to wrap up all of the loose ends (and seeing as I only had three chapters, this was essential) and still leave the reader wanting more or wondering about the story and how hard it is to make sure it doesn't feel like a short story and the time passing isn't too rushed - and yours isn't, trust me.

The introduction of the Baron again brings some more to the ever-expanding plot, and quite honestly I'm interested to see how Helena will react to him coming after her and how and if his apparent love for her shows even when it's obvious that she's not interested in him whatsoever (still writing-as-I-read, so sorry in advance if this is said during the end of chapter). Heck, I'm looking forward to everything and it really is a shame I can't get the time to review the fourth and last chapter before the end of tonight.

The Baron through Helena's eyes really isn't... dashing :p Especially if you compare it to the way she looks at Godric, which amuses me again. Change around the characters, plot and setting and it could definitely pass excellently as any Next Generation story, but even with the romance plot a skeleton of one, somehow 'Fade to Grey' has a voice to it that no other story that I can think of does, and it's wonderful to read because it shows in the way you write.

I don't think you have mentioned whether or not this is the first time that the Baron and Helena meet, but asking her to marry her? Gosh, he really is forward, though I guess this is what you get for reading a story set in the founders era. Especially when you consider the fact that the Baron is indignant Helena didn't fall into his arms and squeal yes while any modern man asking the same question would have probably been beyond devastated if they loved the girl enough to ask for her hand in marraige.

The Baron is beyond creepy o.O "I will return in one week." If I had been Helena, I'm pretty sure I would have fainted dead away on the spot after hearing that - because no means no, surely? He is seriously determined, poor Helena. Now I'm wishing more than ever my parents aren't yelling at me to hurry up with this.

These chapters were absolutely lovely reads and I appreciate getting the chance to review such an awesome story, which really deserves way more reviews than it has now. Once again, merry Christmas Marina, and I hope to see you around for the next round of Secret Santa presents! :D

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