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Review:Secret Santa says:
Back again, lovely! I'm promising myself to give you very long reviews - consider it my Christmas present to you, along with next week's :) Anyway, I have spotted one tiny little flaw in this story - I can't find any mistakes in it! Normally I am ridiculously picky, and by picky I truly do mean that I'm the type of person who can spot spelling mistakes and commas placed inappropriately from a mile away. Kind of ridiculous, but I guess that kinda says something for the quality of your writing.

Helena's thoughts are so... morbid. It's totally a weird thing to point out, I know, so don't mind me but I guess that knowing that she dies in the end and decides not to move on (does it have anything to do with Lord Ravenclaw's death? The thought only occured to me now, admittedly) makes everything she says or does or heck, even thinks, comes off as twisted to me. Though seriously, I think it's just me.

I'm going to bring up the whole period-appropriateness thing again - not to do with descriptions or words this time, but actions! Especially in the first couple of paragraphs, like where Helena describes the messenger boys being easy to bribe just by flashing her ankles at them :p I thought that that was a ridiculously nice touch, not to mention something to add a flash of humour to your otherwise serious story.

I guess I'm so used to the founders being renowned for stuff and that stuff being actually, well, true, that it surprised me a little when Helena mentions that maybe her mother wasn't as intelligent as everyone thought - and there goes you foreshadowing stuff again! Being bitter about Rowena's brains definitely strikes me as being a catalyst for Helena running away with the diadem, not to mention the new reason you mentioned already in the summary and story and gosh, I feel pretty stupid reading this because not even half of the things you have put in would have occured to me if I was writing this. Hmph.

Helena introducing herself as Rowena to Godric made me giggle a little - here I was, reading her thoughts and thinking that she was probably one of those weak-minded people or something until something else gives her a boost to steal the diadem for herself and run away and then she goes and does something as cheeky as this! Just goes to show that you never underestimate any girl, no matter how far in time she's from, especially if you know how her story ends. It always makes me sad, since from reading the books you know the character you're reading about dies.

Ohmygosh, Helena didn't know other people knew about magic *flails wildly* Talk about a bomb dropping! I had assumed from the beginning that everyong used it, thought twice when the Ravenclaws were arguing in the first chapter but the fact that magic (ahem, sorcery) is still pretty hush-hush when it comes to the founder era is definitely interesting. Did I mention that I feel totally stupid every time I read this story?

Long again, I'm sorry - this must be a total pain to read through because I have nothing helpful to offer except gushing over this story. It's too freaking beautiful, hmph. Anyway, onto the next chapter for me, so see you there!

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