|Review:||Secret Santa says:|
Merry Christmas, Marina! :D Sorry for the lateness - I've been out all day today, indulging myself in some books before Christmas Eve, of course, though I could definitely settle for reading any of your stories all day, everyday! For the Secret Santa for the Ravenclaws, this time around I have decided to give you with three or four reviews, depending whether or not I am conned into watching a movie with the family but definitely three at least!
Onto the point. The thing that most struck me while reading Fade to Grey is how effortless the writing is, and how professional it seems - very unfair for the only average writers like me, you know :p Even just by skimming the page you can tell that you have experience in writing and that you probably slaved away over this painstakingly for ages until you found something you liked, and seeing as I'm doing a 'write-as-you-read' review and have barely started the first paragraph, that's definitely saying something about the standard of your writing ;)
YOUR DESCRIPTIONS *dies* I am so jealous. Every paragraph is like one huge chunk of descriptive goodness, and seeing as I rarely, if ever, decide to read a Founders fic, I definitely appreciate it since I have no idea what I'm going in for. Not to mention that everything is perfect in its time - I'm not really sure if that makes much sense (heck, it probably doesn't) - and period-appropriate and nothing feels out of place for the era, even the little things like similes, like this one for example:
"... her mood changing direction like thread on a loom." Even the person who won't quite do so well in history will be able to tell what you mean.
As for the characters - holy graveoli, Helena and her mother are exactly how I imagined them! Even so, Helena has a very original voice, even if the story is told in third-person narrative, and seeing things through her eyes is very interesting, especially since it concerns a story every honest fan knows well - the theft of Rowena's diadem. The premise itself seems intriguing, not to mention that even in the first chapter you're tying up any loose ends J.K. Rowling presented to us and making up your own. Not to mention the foreshadowing or lampshading or whatever you want to call it - I can see why Helena seems so bitter towards her mother.
You even mentioned the Baron and his love! Since he killed himself for Helena, he must have loved her truly but you give us a reason why Helena never loved him back instead of leaving it to our imaginations or just plain out saying that she hated him for no good reason at all.
Yikes, this thing is long :p Still, since I'm only giving you three or four (for now, cough, cough) I'm glad it's long. This chapter was a lovely one with everything you'd come to expect from an accomplished writer and/or an introductory chapter - I'm looking forward to the next!