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Review:Your Secret Santa says:
Hi there again.

My favorite part about this story is your characterization. We get to know both Amelia and Eleanor better. This chapter makes me believe even stronger that Eleanor doesn't want to be a part of this, and she definitely doesn't want this war. I love how you write that she feels like she should be happy and excited, yet she's not. It makes it clear that Eleanor isn't exactly like the other Death Eaters, because she really doesn't like what they are doing. She doesn't enjoy it like Bellatrix. I also love how she bitterly explains that the war is taking their future away from them, forcing them to do things they don't want to do. It, again, makes me think she is forced into this, that it's not something she wants to do. I also love how she mentions her family, and how bitter she sounds when she explains how people view them.

I also love Amelia (And I love them name, it's the name of my OC in the story I'm writing). She seems very different from Eleanor, but the connection/the bond between them feels very real. They are different, yet they do have amazing chemistry.

I also have to mention Sirius. He is probably the character I need to think is realistic no matter what, because I love him (especially during marauders era). If I think he is acceptable, then you have definitely written him well. But I didn't think that about the Sirius in your story. I actually LOVED him. It's just how I imagined him, and I'm so excited right now. And I loved the interactions between him and Eleanor, but I have to admit I'm kind of curious about their relationship. What are they exactly? Actually, don't answer that. I'll find out later. I just can't wait to see what will happen between them. This is by far my favourite story, and I can't wait to read the next chapter.

- Your Secret Santa

Author's Response: Hi! I'm so happy that you like the characterization! That, to me, is one of the most important parts in a story and it's such a compliment that you think it's strong here. It's great that your picking that up from her, how she isn't in the war right now, for good or bad and she doesn't see it as something she can really give her soul to. I think there is so many stories about someone fighting desperately for a cause that they forget the people who weren't sure, who were scared or who hated war.

I have a special place for Amelia too and i like that you feel like their friendship is actually there. I've read stories, not just ff, but boks where it feels like the interactions are stale and forced. That is definitely not what i'd like to see in my story so it's really great to see you write that you liked it.

and THANK YOU!! (i'm saying that a ot it seems, your reviews really have blown me away) Anyway, thank you SO much for that massive compliment about Sirius. I hope he continues to be good because I have a lot of love for him too and I constantly fear that his characterization isn't strong enough. It's good to hear that you think i'm going something right, even if he just comes in briefly here.

Thank you so much! I'm really pleased you've enjoyed this so far! I hope to see you around again :P


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