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Review:lia_2390 says:
I'm a sucker for first lines, and I rather enjoyed yours. As bad as it sounds, it made me chuckle. Poor Rose, she didn't even want to go and now it looks like she should have stayed home. I can relate a little with her though, I can't really deal with my family sometimes either.

I love that bits and pieces of Rose are still revealed to us. The Weasley family is so vast, it's hard not to mention all of them in any Next Gen novel, or have that they all work in the same place. It's a bit scary, actually.

Your chapter title and the first verse of Life on Mars plays out a lot in this particular chapters. Maybe it's a bit too soon to say, but the 'she' in question could possibly relate to your Rose.

It's mostly platonic, you see.
Indeed. Funny how she refers to Mrs Tonks as her 'not-official-grandmother-in-law', now her and Ted are something of the platonic nature. Denial is a dirty sin….and in this case, so is fear. It also makes me think that whatever they are, they haven't confirmed it to each other. Teddy obviously has one idea, while in Rose's mind she wants to run in the opposite direction, but she's frozen to the spot.

I suppose this is one of those stories of the 'will they / won't they' variety'. I can't read Rose at the moment, and it's frustrating. Maybe she's as confused as I am.

Victoire was surprisingly civil, I'm a bit impressed. Her words struck a cord which could be the sum of all Rose's fears.

Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked that first line. If it's okay to say so, I'm kind of proud of it. It's a challenge to come up with good one-liners, or humour in general. It definitely helps to imagine the worst of all family get-togethers. *grimaces* They can be awful! But Rose makes the situation seem a lot worse than it is. The people there are happy to see her, but she focuses on the bad things - the meetings with James and Victoire most notably. In this chapter, I want readers to be frustrated with Rose, leading to Rose becoming frustrated with herself in two chapters. She has to realize how badly she's responding to the world around her and begin the process of digging herself out of this hole of discontent (it's not depression, but it could become that if she lets herself continue in this way).

The "she" of the song does mostly relate to Rose. She sees what her life could be if she follows the set script, but she doesn't want to, partially out of fear that it will be boring, and a rebelliousness she's inherited from her parents.

One thing I have to make more clear is that Rose isn't trying to run away from her relationship with Teddy - she's just trying to run away from a cemented commitment to her future (not even to a relationship, but to everything else that's going to happen in her life). I think I'll go back in this chapter and the one that follows it to make that more explicit. It will help... I hope.

Thank you very much for your review! It's really helping me think of where I want to take this story and how to best work through Rose's issues. She's become a more complicated and frustrating character than I anticipated, but it will all work out in the end. :)


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