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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hey!

Here I am, offering you a review and shamelessly stalking random fanfics like I've been doing all day and since I've never given you a review before, its nice to meet you and all that. :D
We've talked on the forums but the archives are different you know! Not really. :p
Anyway, moving on!
I read the summary for this, thinking that this would immediatley venture into a Hogwarts-drama sort of thing. Thankfully, it didn't proceed in that direction because I can't quite see Mr. Tom Riddle getting into those sort of squabbles.
I did like the opening for this story, it seemed to me to be very sweet. The way Walburga regarded herself as a proud bride-to-be was rather touching, but was later sort of worrisome after I finished the chapter. I'll get to that later. To be honest, I wasn't really sure who your main character was at first but I eventually got to understand that this was about Fee. I enjoyed how supportive she was and even though Walburga's mother was about as nice as a cactus, it was nice seeing Fee being helpful regardless. Now. On to those men! I actually liked Orion, he didn't come off as really stuffy like I would have pictured and Alphard didn't come off as very likeable. I didn't appreciate his nasty comment to Fee either and I didn't get why she considered him a friend to her after it. Perhaps there's more to it that we need to know? Hm? I'll be on the lookout for that then. With Walburga and Fee in the carriage, I liked the turn of conversation about the sort of man that would capture her fancy. There should have been a few breaks in her sentences I think but it was good peek into her character. And what's this? She and Tom?! I honestly didn't really expect there relationship to be so romantic...or, perhaps I'm wrong? :D
Can't picture Tom as being romantic/friendly! That's going to be an interesting read. :)
But anyway, on to that wedding. It was a little concerning to find out that Walburga wasn't really as interested in marrying Orion as he was here. That's going to pose some future problems, I think and I'm really glad that you made that apparent. Its a bit different from say, a fairty tale like wedding that I've read in books and watched on TV with amazingly rich people. Haha.
Now, Alphard's POV was a little hard for me to get into since I was still sort of annoyed with his attitude but I got over it eventually. Haha. I was really worried when he mentioned Walburga's drinking habit and I'm not sure if that's going to play a bit mmore in the story. Hopefully, it will because that's a serious issue! And, that ending. Well, I think him being jealous of Tom serves him right! Perhaps he should have said something to Fee! Haha. Will you have some sort of confrontation later? :D
Anyway, this was pretty interesting, I don't read many things about the Black family this far back. Its a good break from some of the other things that I've been reading so thanks! :D
See you on the forums and I hope this wasn't too long!
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Haha, thank you! Nice to meet you too, Gabbie; I'm Katie! (Side note: our names rhyme! Woo!)

I do mention in that summary that they're newly graduated. ;) I'm considering changing it after the queue re-opens though.

Thank you! As Fee is a mysterious character, I didn't want to introduce her at the beginning as this would have required including her backstory, which I didn't want to do so early in the story. So, I used an established canon character instead. XD

"Walburga's mother was about as nice as a cactus" absolutely, honestly cracked me up! Orion is a very complex character, and you'll see him again in chapters three (a small mention) and seven (a life-changing event). I'm sorry that you found Alphard unlikeable; he and Fee are best friends and that comment wasn't actually malicious, it was actually out of his jealousy, because he feels that she dates everybody but him. (That's an exaggeration, but Alphard is biased and so his POV is distorted.)

I didn't want to put breaks in Fee's speech, because I saw her in that moment as going off on a tangent and being so absorbed in what she was saying that she wouldn't notice interruptions. As for Tom, he does come across as pleasant and friendly, but in chapter six he shows his true colours in unpleasant ways. ;)

Walburga's alcoholism becomes a serious issue in chapters four and seven, and has devastating consequences.

Thank you for this lovely review, and it wasn't too long! I'm glad you found this interesting; perhaps you'd like to read the rest? ;)

-Katie

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