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Review:Secret Santa says:
YAY! Bookish characters! I really love bookish characters because they remind me of me. I hope you'll be getting good books for Christmas!

Anyway. I think that, despite its size, this is quite a lovely start for the chapter. You allow us but a tiny glimpse into what it's like to be in the narrator's head/life, you let us know a few basic things about her, and you introduced a prospective love interest. The thing about all of those things you've introduced is that you didn't give much explanation about them which allows questions to arise. I'm sitting here wondering what is it that scares Lydia of commitment? And what was James doing in that library (and with a laptop) that day?

Another thing I'm feeling right now is that I want to give Lydia a bit of advice. I would say: "Lydia, it takes a lot of commitment to finish a book, to stay faithful to its characters until it ends. So you practice commitment without even realising it. You just need to find a person who deserves commitment as much as a good book does."

Or something of that sort anyway.

I also really like James. I think that he was flirting (I'm not entirely sure as I don't really know him yet), and yet he seemed to be a gentleman. The interaction between him and Lydia felt very natural and I was happy to not see hearts and butterflies flutter into the air!

There are a few typos --some dialogue tags and misspelled words, but otherwise everything seems fine.

I also really liked how you sealed the chapter.

All in all, well done! I happened to be in the mood for fluff, and I'm really liking this so far. I can't wait to see what comes next!

Clue: I've already told you. I really, really like books.

Author's Response: Thank you so very much! :) Your reviews totally brighten my day! Gosh, I really don't know who you are now... I'll have to do some investigating :)

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