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Review:academica says:
Hi again! This is review two of ten :)

I really like the way you've tried to spice things up in the next generation. For example, I think the idea of taking an Alchemy class is really cool, and I can definitely see it being a challenge that mostly Ravenclaws (and Hermione, if she were there) would want to aspire to. I also like how you've given the students a new Hufflepuff head of house and had her teaching Potions, of all things. Way to break the mold!

Hah, Albus is pretty weird, but it's sort of cute. I like that he's not supposed to be dreamy in this story; again, that's a nice deviation from the norm. The thought of Mariah scaring him was funny, too.

Oh, and I like that your birthday party seemed age-appropriate--none of the usual debauchery here! That was probably the most refreshing twist of all, because I'm so sick of reading Marauders/Next Gen stories that are all about how rebellious and mature the students are. I liked that they just played games and ate ice cream, and that Neville joined in. I could see him agreeing to attend the party and having a good time there.

My previous mentions about some of the stylistic and technical errors apply to this chapter as well.

Good work -- on to the next!

~*your slytherin secret santa*~

Author's Response: Hiya! *waves*
Thank you, I'm so glad that you liked that. I didn't want it to be the same teachers, because I was thinking that they might be in retirement over nineteen years later.
I really wanted to use the subject Alchemy because I've never seen anyone else use it in a story, even though it's one of the available subjects.

Oh Albus, I wanted to make him as weird as possible, he isn't dreamy in the slightest in this story but he thinks that he is. I'm glad that you like him and Mariah scaring him, she'll scare him more in the rest of the story.

Haha I'm so happy that you liked the party, it didn't make sense for them to get drunk and sneaking out, when they could have just as much fun playing party games. It made sense to invite Neville to the party, I bet he loved it :D

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing :D


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