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Review:Akussa says:
Hi! This is your Swap Review and, really sorry that it comes in so late, my Internet stopped working for some obscure reason and for an even more obscure one, it now works perfectly...

Moving on, I just loved this story! I'm a huge fan of missing moments types of stories because I just love seeing how different authors interpret a situation that wasn't shown in the books. I had never thought of that particular moment and especially not in the way you did.
Having Fred (and George) get their father's approval was so perfect for them. They're the kind of kids that always seem like they don't care what others think or what impacts their decisions might have on others but it's not true and you proved your point completly with this.

I think Arthur's reaction was very real; a father (and a mother as well) would always be worried about his children and never wants to see them face failure. A father wishes to protect his children from all that is bad and that might hurt them, physically and emotionnally. And no cocky teenager can understand that, of course!

I really like the idea of Fred finding the letter for Godric Gryffindor. Mostly, I love that he discovers yet another secret of the castle just before he leaves, showing that there will always be surprises in life.

I noticed one little thing that needs changing. In the letter Fred writes to his Dad, he says that they are going to sell jokes in Hogsmead when in reality, it's on Diagon Alley. Since they already have their premise by the time they leave school (which is the day after this was written) I don't think Fred would mix up the two magical spots!

Other then that, it was a brilliant one shot. I enjoyed it a lot and tought you did a great job at portraying Fred and bringing him to understanding his father's reaction.

Akussa

Author's Response: Hi Akussa! Thanks for swapping with me :)

I'm glad you liked seeing this side of Fred. I always figured there must be times when he and George feel unsure of themselves, but those moments aren't really shown in the books. And I can definitely imagine Arthur being wary about the idea of them taking such a risk with their business.

You're so right about the Hogsmeade thing! Fred never would have mixed that up, but I sure did. I'll go back and edit that as soon as I can.

Thanks again for swapping with me, and for the great review! It was really helpful, and I'm so happy you enjoyed the story.

--Maggie


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