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Review:Santa Claus; the one and only, of course! says:
Ho! Ho! Ho! Happy holidays!

This is an interesting opening chapter in many ways. First, I like your main character, Tam. She is interesting and I kinda want to know more about her (for example, I do wonder if her dad is Cormac and, if so, how he got into the good graces of the Weasley family at some point !! ).

One other thing I liked about this story is the fact that you made Albus and Louis Ravenclaws instead of classic Gryffindors or Slytherins. It's a good point of view and an original one at that.

I noticed a few errors that I wish to point out to you in order for you to improve this already great chapter.

"Thatís probably because itís exactly right conclusion, sweetie..."; I'm sorry but there seems to be a word or two missing in this sentence because I don't understand it...

"We ran like a wind towards the train..."; shouldn't it be "ran like THE wind"?

"...As if she didnít she know,..."; there's an extra "she" in this sentence

That's it. See? It wasn't anything major, just little things.

I enjoyed this chapter and hope you will continue it; it'll be quite the interesting summer for Tam and Louis... in the same house... under Bill's careful eye...

Your Secret Santa :)

Author's Response: Happy holidays!

Yes, Tam's father is Cormac. It definitely adds some interesting times in later chapters, plus Cormac McLaggen as a father? Such a fun idea. =P

Thanks for pointing out the errors. Once the queue opens, I will fix those as soon as possible.

I'm glad you enjoyed the beginning. I've the next chapter ready, but the queue closed a couple of hours earlier than I expected and thus it will be updated after Christmas.

I can see Bill being very interesting father figure. It will be a summer to remember. ;) Thank you for the review, dear Santa. So nice of you to stop by. =)


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