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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there, Katie! I am finally here! I read this chapter a couple of days ago on my phone...and meant to review once I got hold of a computer. And forgot. I’m sorry!

So this is another great instalment to your fic! That exchange between Fee and Septimus was too funny! It was a lovely bit of dialogue...well...more like snarky and scornful and sardonic but still wonderfully entertaining. I'm not sure if this is intended, but that final bit where Septimus addresses Fee as "sweetie" came off as rather – flirty. I mean I know he intended to rile her further, but it felt like he was riling her in an umm, flirtatious sort of manner. I already hope there'll be a ton of scenes between these two; there's so much energy (and not all of it positive bahaha) when these two get together! This scene actually kind of overshadowed the next bit where Fee and Alphard discuss things over dinner. Well, Alphard does pale in comparison to both Tom and Septimus so far! Poor Alphard...

But then the ending! Fee is going to move in with Alphard! Just when I thought he doesn’t really stand a chance with Fee! And then they decide to move in together, or well, she becoming a lodger at his place or something...so I guess there's plenty of room for things to develop between them even if she does feel uncertain and uncomfortable about her friend? I love how complex and tangled everything is becoming – the plot, the characterisations, the relationships between people. It's quite intriguing.

This chapter has been just lovely to read. It has much more dialogue than narrative, but all of it was really well-written, and it all flowed so naturally and easily and the conversations weren't stilted at all. I enjoyed the touches of snarky humour here and there; I think they did a great job of lightening the mood. Speaking of mood, there was a shift in this when I got to the mystery letter. It just felt much heavier and more melancholy. And I really liked the change. As usual, there’s a lot of control in your writing, with regards to pacing and flow and atmosphere.

OK, well, more great writing! I've really enjoyed this :D Love your characters more than ever and I'm looking forward to your next update! Apologies once again for taking so long to review!

-teh

Author's Response: Hello there, teh! It's not a problem at all- I do that kind of thing myself! :P

I actually have no idea how I managed to write those scenes! In fact, the next time Septimus makes an appearance in Chapter 8: "Of Weasels And Ferrets", I'll be quaking in my seat trying to create something that'll match up to this amazing success I've received!

Now that you mention it, I see it now but I didn't notice it when I was writing. I saw him as more of doing anything possible to rile Fee and "sweetie" was the only way he knew how to at that moment, since they only just met. But I'm glad that you liked it! XD

Poor Alphard indeed! I wanted to include him in this chapter, since he won't be in the next three at least, and I know! I felt bad for Alphard to be stuck on the sidelines, so I decided to use him to set the stage: highlighting Fee's uncertainty of him which leads to chapter six where we learn why. And it's not a very nice ending. *hides*

I have no idea how I've managed to create this complex and tangled fanfiction, or how it flows so naturally and easily. I can't write humour to save my life, so for you to say that this chapter had snarky humour included blows me away, and as for "a lot of control" in my writing: to be completely honest, I just sit down and start typing and it all ends up on the screen with the story writing itself. Some days, I think the only purpose I serve to this fanfic is to actually get it from my word processor to HPFF. :')

But thank you, thank you, thank you so much for showering me with all of your lovely compliments! I really do appreciate them! ♥

And again, don't worry about the delay!

-Katie

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