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Review:The Misfit says:

Seriously, the fact that my "E" key is broken and I've yet to receive a replacement (I copied & pasted one "E" and use Ctrl+V whenever I need to type one) makes fanfics difficult to write, so I tried out the Gadsby challenge and I could not get past two sentences. So the fact that you've written five hundred words has me in awe. Seriously.

Now to the fanfic: awww. ♥ Severus' thoughts while he was dying! (Side note: that freezer is going to have to be industrial-sized.) I absolutely loved the way he thought of Lily, and considered Harry hers alone, and hated him for looking like a carbon copy of James... it's all stuff we know from the books, but you really bring it to life in this one-shot, and somehow manage to make it unique. I have so much love for your writing, seriously. How you manage to bring Severus to life just blows me away.

I especially loved the paragraph where Severus' thoughts go off on tangents- And I am so angry... (Did you know...) It just signified how much, despite everything, even his internal monologue is interrupted by his obsession and love for Lily.

The only thing that I could possibly criticize (and I'm probably nitpicking here) is that "tortuous" is actually spelt "torturous". Yes, I know there's one little "R" missing, but I honestly can't find anything bad.

This is flawless. ♥

Author's Response: -faint- YOU ARE TOO NICE TO ME, I SWEAR.

This was one of the more fun things I can ever remember writing -- and not because of the plot itself, because it's, yet again, one of my little unrequited Severus/Lily pieces, nothing more. But this was such a challenge, and I had to think so hard while writing it, and I had to KNOW what I wanted to say... and it was just a blast. I want to try this challenge again soon, and maybe write an even longer story! This would have been perfect for you and a broken keyboard. :D

I think I unintentionally put James somewhere in all my Severus/Lily stories, but it's really like I said to you earlier: James is a large part of that ship. I love thinking of how Snape might have viewed Harry, too, while protecting him. Alan Rickman played him so well because of all his hidden knowledge, and sometimes his facial expressions in the movies will spark inspiration for things like this. I was watching PoA with a friend yesterday and absolutely dying of adoration at all the Sirius/Remus/Severus back-and-forth there. BUT I'VE LOST MY TRAIN OF THOUGHT.

... Which makes it fitting that you wrote a paragraph about Snape's tangents. Whoops. :3 And thank you for catching that error! I think it should be illegal to have words as similar as 'tortuous' (winding) and 'torturous' (painful) in the English language, but so it goes.

Thank you so, so much for such a fantastic review!! ♥

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