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Review:Secret Santa says:
Hi Beeezie :) I'm your secret santa, which is probably rather obvious considering the penname ;)
I've been reading the Wrinkles of the Road for a long time now, although I didn't read any of Curiosity Is Not a Sin, I think you only had the first two chapters or something up at the time... I feel bad for not reviewing up until now, but at least your getting some reviews :) And I'll stop talking now ;)

So I like the beginning, I like the idea that Rose used to find the family gathering type things tedious and annoying, but now secretly looks forward to them, which I'm sure for people in real life, you don't enjoy things until they become less and less frequent. I also really like this line: 'There was just something about being in her grandparents' house that made any other problems she had melt away.', I can really relate to that, it's like when I'm at my Grandparents' house, I don't really worry about anything, and I think it makes your characterisation really realistic :)

Now I'm not sure whether you made it up, but if you did: I really like your X Classifications for the creatures :) X is dangerous, well more dangerous than XXX isn't it, or am I just making that up? Either way I really like it :) It shows you've really thought about the story etc. (If you didn't make it up, you can just disregard that whole paragraph)

I think it's quite funny that James and Scorpius would be talking about either Quidditch or Healing, as they are quite different, but it made me smile :)

One thing is, this bit confused me slightly: '"Well, I don't have the patience to do it," he'd said when she teased him about quitting the Ministry and starting in on Healer training instead. "I just think it's interesting. I mean, they can really repair the human body. It makes me a lot less nervous about being a bit reckless!" // Given how little concern James had ever showed for his safety, Rose was still a bit worried about what "a lot less nervous" meant.' Because, at first I thought it was James speaking, then when you mentioned that the character quitted the Ministry and started 'in on Healer training instead', I thought it was Scorpius, but then the second bit about James and his lack off concern made me think it was James speaking.. So I'm not too sure who was speaking then, so next time you feel like editing etc, you might want to clarify that a bit. Although I may just be having a bit of a brain-dead moment at that that bit.

I like the conversation between Al and Rose about Scorpius, it seems so l, like I talk to people I'm close to about my boyfriend, well, they probably want to torch me at some points for doing so, but I seems so normal :)

I really like the fact Scorpius wants her to meet his Grandmother; I've already read the scene, but I think from this of she does go, which I know she does, then it's going to be rather awkward, which I'm pretty certain it is, if my memory is working properly ;)

I hope this has helped :) I know you said you'd quite like CC, but I'm rubbish at it, but I have tried :|

Merry Christmas/Happy Holidays :D
-Your Secret Santa ;)

Author's Response: Hey! ♥ It's okay if you're not very good at CC - it's not, like, totally necessary or anything. :P

I definitely see what you mean about that sentence - when the queue reopens I'll edit it to make it more clear.

The X system is actually canon - the monsters are ranked that way in Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them. :) X is not at all dangerous (e.g., flobberworms), and X is really dangerous (e.g., manticores).

I definitely agree re: my grandparents' house - I borrowed a bit from my life, there, because I also have a lot of cousins and I love family gatherings at my grandparents' house because I can see them (and everyone else, I guess :P).

Thank you so much for the review, dear Santa. :) Happy Christmas!


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