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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there! I'm from the Holiday Review Swap :)

Aaahhh, this is such an amazing story. It's very layered and complex with its treatment of time; I love how you separate the present from the past through differences in tenses, as well as how the other storyline is set apart with the italics. One of my favourite things was how the italicised flashback/parallel story was broken up mid-sentence and interspersed throughout the main body of the narrative. It gave a really fractured sense to the memory, and an insight into Teddy's mind, which is shattered by shock and grief and anger. Also, there was such wonderful contrasts with the moods of both the main narrative and the italicised bits!

Your descriptions were lovely as well, and added such realistic detail to Teddy's life. I think you write his changing voice very well...from an insecure child attending Hogwarts for the first time to the older family member to whom all the Weasley children look up, and finally as an adult in a relationship wtih Victoire. You really conveyed Teddy's sense of responsibility toward the other younger Weasley children very well. His blaming himself is very realistic and is really painful to read. What's especially tragic is the complete lack of closure for him. And I think you did a fantastic job of tying in his parents' death together with Fred's accident. It was a wonderful touch to the story, and just added so much emotional depth to it.

And arggghhh...FRED. What about George? I just...can't...imagine poor George. This line hit me so hard: The name on the gravestone is cursed. a scar healed and then torn open by his failure. It's an amazing line and it very subtly alluded to George (I think). This is just too depressing :(

Anyway, fantastic writing! I'm really glad I found this story :D It's been a thoroughly enjoyable read and your style is wonderful. Happy hols :D

-teh

Author's Response: I think this has to be my favourite story I've written. Everything is there for a reason, and you've pretty much picked up on everything. We see Teddy grow, flicking between various contrasts in time as we build up a picture of him. It was very important to me that there was no obvious closure for Teddy at the end - I do believe some kinds of grief never really get the closure you search for and for Teddy the Fred thing was just the last straw after never really finding closure over his parents' deaths.

He always felt this need to protect and nurture the Weasleys, partly because he lacked an extended family of his own and wanted a link with them, but also because he wants to protect them from the harm he feels. As the oldest, he feels a responsibility towards them that is very powerful. They all look up to him, just as Fred did when he came to Teddy about his engagement. To blame himself for something that was not directly his fault is cruel, because he finds it easy to blame himself and because Fred's death has a certain after effect that the other cousin's don't have. George has to go through his grief again. Teddy knows how that feels and that's why he feels guilty.

The main problem, I think, is that Teddy almost believes things would be easier and better if his parents were there. Chances are, things wouldn't be that different, but it stops him from moving on.

Although what happens next isn't written here, in my head I always felt that eventually Teddy would accept the loss of Fred and forgive himself, but that would take a long time.

Thank you so much for the lovely review! I'm very glad you enjoyed it :)


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