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Review:Jchrissy says:
Oh! OH! How did I not figure that out?? What a marvelous little trickster you are!! Sneaky, sneaky author.

Back to the chapter..

I loved the beginning and the interactions between the group. Seamus following Oliver Wood around as a little fan girl style makes my day so much happier. And then when they talk about him once following Oliver into the locker room while he showers... HAHA. You are a very funny writer, it makes reviewing so much more fun ♥

I also really liked that you showed Edie taking the advice of last chapter and making sure Dean knows that she's thrilled he got her the job. Her thank you moment here was actually rather touching.

I felt so bad for her the next morning. I think you did so perfect with the -mostimportantdayofmylife and nothing is going right!- feeling. Because that happens much, much too often. And the poor girl is so stressed about being late by two minutes then she's stuck in that place for an hour waiting on him. I still hadn't connected that it might be the man from last night, too hungover to properly get up. And then when she noticed Viktor walk in I STILL DIDN'T GET IT. I clearly need more coffee. But anyway, you surprised me and it was so awesome and just had me in thrilled.

You really should be proud of this story so far. My style of reviewing pretty much is that I read the story like I'm reading any other story. I don't make myself find things to point out, but I point things out if I notice them. Anyone can find any kind of CC in the world's best story, but if you just let yourself read it for the sake of reading it, then it's easier to decide if something actually is off. And absolutely nothing stuck out at me in this chapter. Not only that, but I was very, very into it.

I am also pretty thrilled that Seamus did end up showing up. I mean, come one, if he once followed him into the boys locker room while Oliver was showering, nothing like a little threat from Edie should scare him off ;).

This was a delightful chapter m'dear! I look forward to reading the next!

Author's Response: Yay!! I'm really excited that I managed to surprise readers with that twist... even if it was just due to a lack of coffee ;D

I love Edie♥Dean bromance moments, so I take every chance I can to put them in the story. And I'm so glad you like Seamus so much, he's kind of my favorite thing ever.

That's a really good point about reading a story just to read it, and how you can find CC to give for pretty much anything ever written. I think I'll keep that in mind for my own reviews offered thread.

Thank you again, so much!

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