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Review:Aphoride says:
Hey there - here to return your review! Sorry about the long wait - things were absolutely hectic at uni the last few days and now it's holidays so I've finally got some time to myself for reviewing.

First off, for your first (on this site at least...) story, this is incredible. I love how you've used the whole idea of George and Fred looking identical to each other and made George kinda feel like Fred, like he could be Fred - like he could be both of them somehow. Almost like the idea of living for someone, you know, but so much literal than that. It's kinda heartbreaking.

Also, I loved the way you used all those stories that go around about twins being able to sense things to do with each other, like pain and injuries and things. It was a little odd - I didn't really understand whether or not George knew Fred was dead before he was told by Percy or if he was just imagining it after the battle was all over or what, but it didn't really matter because it's a pretty minor thing in terms of the whole story and it worked so well - the imagery was wonderful.

I do have to question, though, why Lee was so convinced George was Fred. Given that, as George mentioned, George only has one ear and Fred has two, not to mention that even though they're identical there will be differences between them in appearance that Lee, being their best mate, would know, it seems a little odd for him to make such a mistake for such a while, even when considering that it's during a battle. I know it's part of the sense of it, but maybe add in some description, maybe an injury or something, which would explain that? Otherwise, it's just a little weird...

Percy and Ginny and Bill... I love how you included the other Weasleys, and how carefully you seemed to have chosen them. It didn't seem just like you picked them at random or whatever bit, more like you chose them deliberately because of their characters and all the rest of it and it really developed their characters so well (particularly Bill - I got the feeling he was trying to be brave and strong because he's the oldest and it's his job to look after the others and he wants to help George but doesn't really know how) Gah, they were just all so perfectly characterised. Honestly.

So, yeah, I really, really love this - the last lines are just fabulous as well and so haunting when you think that they're coming from such a mischievous character as George.

Aph xx

Author's Response: Hello there Aph!

Aww, thanks so much for your lovely review :D And apologies for taking five hundred years to respond to it :(
George was pretty much in a state of denial in the earlier part of the chapter :) I guess it can get quite hazy and confusing; maybe I should straighten parts of it out a little. I just wanted to reflect the chaotic state of George's thoughts :) And for the Lee Jordan bit, I sort of assumed that it would be dark and confusing in Hogwarts during the battle, and I thought there might be a possibility that even someone close to the twins might mistake them in all the chaos...might be difficult to see the missing year? I dunno, maybe :P

Thanks for pointing that out, though! I will definitely go through the chapter again :D
Thanks for your review again! Really made my day :D


-teh


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