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Review:Jchrissy says:
I just realized when looking around at what I wanted to read on your page, I've read at least half the stories!

Anyway, you know by all my gushyness on WAT how much I love the Weasleys. And this story, sad as it may be, about Molly and Arthur was absolutely beautiful.

The style you wrote it in... the way that every moment with the healer moved forward, getting closer and closer to telling her the news, and the way that the memories went backwards, taking her father from that office... it was such a perfect style and these are the times I just want to bottle up your talent and keep it. I'll be like the evil woman on The Little Mermaid who takes Ariel's voice. Except I'll take your talent and won't promise you legs to meet your sexy future husband.. hmm. This isn't sounding like a good deal on your part :P

Anyway, the first memory of him tinkering with the pipe, I was afraid you were going to show him falling or something and we'd know that soon what happened, so I was really happy when you left it at a back spasm and continued the mixture of reality and memories.

I never thought too much on exactly what Molly was feeling when she realized her youngest son and his two best friends were gone. But I think you've written it so well here it could have slipped in teh seventh book and no one would know it wasn't JKR. The way they both reacted, the methodical way Molly searched for her children one after another, was just perfect. And then that moment with her and Arthur when she tells him that they aren't there ;(.

Ahh the way you're giving us just a few lines of relativity before blocking back out to the memory is perfect. It really makes me feel like I could be Molly, sitting there... trying so hard to believe that if I don't hear anything and tune it out it can't be real..

The 'I'm pregnant' memory and the proposal memory are absolutely precious. It just makes the end result of this piece so much more heart breaking and gah I just want to cry for her :(.

I loved that you showed just how excited they were about the baby that a cake got burnt. Now that takes some serious distraction for Mrs. Weasley to burn a cake.. I wonder just what they were up to... ;). Just kidding, I know exactly what they were up to.

A stroke :(. Something so human, so plain... after living through years of dark wizards, being bitten by a poisonous snake.. and a stroke does him in :(. It's such a muggle death, but I think that was probably perfect for Arthur. And at least Molly has all of her family to lean on ♥ But you made my heart get all breaky and I hate the idea of one of one of them living without another :(

This was absolutely gorgeous, Melissa. Your choice of style, the forwards competing with backwards, and italicizing the memories.. it all went to creating such an emotional piece. Awesome, awesome one shot ♥

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