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Review:LovlyRita says:
Hello there here for the holiday review swap!

Well I really enjoyed the beginning of this story. It is so bitterly sad, especially since you know the way they ended up. I think exploring their story is going to be very interesting indeed. And I remember when this got Slytherin SOTM so yay! :)

The Bloody Baron here is so...fragile I guess. In the books he is depicted as this austere, angry, scary figure, the ghost of Slytherin house. Here, he is a man broken, mourning everything he'd lost, everything that could never be, and it's just incredibly sad. I'm also really looking forward to the way that you handle these things.

During the dancing scene in her wedding dress, I totally got a beauty and the beast feeling going. I kept seeing this young girl in a beautiful hall, and then her prince coming up to her, and they are all happy and everything is Disney-tastic. Which was written and described so beautifully, and it was so haunting. And it was in stark contrast to the ghost who stared into it longingly, wishing that it would come true.

They say that the mirror of erised ruins many a great man, but having it torture a ghost, someone who is already dead, someone who literally has no hope of it ever coming true, gives it a new quality, much more depressing :(

And yet so well done. I really enjoyed the last line, how you described the tiara as wicked, and I think that it just makes me want to read on! Absolutely bewitching, excellent job! :)

Author's Response: Hi Ash! Thanks for coming by to check this out!

Fragile is a good way of describing him. I really wanted to present him as a broken man to try to generate a little bit of pity for the character I was about to create. If you read on, you'll see that he probably needs all the pity he can get. He's definitely got some flaws!

It's great that you liked the imagery and the contrast between the Baron's vision in the mirror and the reality of his lonely existence. I'm glad it wasn't too depressing to enjoy :)

Thanks again for your very kind review, and I hope to see you back here sometime soon!


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