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Review:academica says:
Hello! I'm here for a holiday review swap :)

This is a great idea for a story. I think you characterized Narcissa really, really well. She seems very tied up in her perceived destiny of becoming a mother, and I like the contrast between that and her more vulnerable moments where she's in tears because her wish hasn't yet come true. I also like Lucius--I didn't think I would at first, because he seemed so accepting of her grief despite her distraught appearance and lack of an heir. But the dinner table scene where he says that adopting would not be "practical" makes it all fit without hitting me over the head with his personality. The subtlety there is quite powerful.

I did notice one typo near the end of this chapter. I think you meant to write "limbs" and wrote "limp," so I would go back in and check the Floo scene.

On a stylistic note, I like how you used the months to guide the story and show us just how long Narcissa had been waiting to get pregnant. The scene at the beginning with the snow was also great. I especially like the line about the snow piling on top of her instead of the window, making her feel miserable inside. I have a feeling I'll be back soon to see how Bellatrix reacts to her sister.

Amanda :)

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